A token
May be broken
It seems to me
Far too easily
Whats easy gotten
Goes soonest rotten
And so in truth
Is no proof of integrity
If I am not enough
Then it's over for us
For you value me
Far too cheaply
Ah but now I see
What you seek
Is not the product
It's the currency!
A contest entry
- Your love is my perfect disaster. by ellaelu.
1000 points, ended July 18, 19 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Comments
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This is truly poetic...
the ideas were unique and deeply true. Love is often times regretted over its true value. And this thoughts in your poem, I think are wonderful.
Blessed be
-Blanche
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Hi Blanche
Nice to meet you Blanche. Simple little pome really. A decent point though I think. I do think it would be better if folks were open with their true feelings rather than using tokens as representative. I think it's possible to get so used to using tokens as a means of showing feeling you can forget how to express yourself for real...until it's too late! Although, I guess open can mean vulnerable [or is it less fun?]. Take care x sarah
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"Ah but now I see
What you seek
Is not the product
But the currency"
Very true poet! So many people are just like that. Excellent write!
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Hi Arafura
Thanks again. You're right...plenty do.
Keep a box of chocs in the glove box, be excused anything [but the pox].
x sarah
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Very different. I liked it. Too often we compare love with materialistic value. To very different things. thanks for entering.
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Hi BB
Firstly thanks for running the competition BB. As for the sentiment in this, I think tokens are a nice way of showing you have your partner on your mind but then...they're often given out of a sense of duty or as 'excuse me's' so it's best not to see them as a measure of love itself [although plenty do I think]. take care BB, may your luck be good x sarah
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