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not tonight

 

 

 

Here I go giving in to you again.

 

Just when

I thought we had it right; you

prove me wrong.

 

I want to learn how to speak

the words that sit here; tired on

the tip of my tongue...

 

like not tonight.

 

Instead I give in to the rythym

of your voice; can almost

feel it linger on the nape

of my neck. Where you whispered

such transparent lies.

 

Sing them to me again. Even though

I know tomorrow the music will die.

 

I will wake alone to the ache of woman

& clear-cut intentions of man.

 

I will tell myself it won't happen again

as I spill hours of wet from my eyes;

knowing damn well it will.

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

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  • Saffron gold member
    July 8

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    There's so much pain reflected in this piece, especially with the description of giving in even though the voice in the piece knows that it's only for immediate gratifcation, and will most likely happen again.  This has strong images--check the spelling in L9 of rhythm.

    Thanks for writing this for the contest, and for sharing your talent--I am really happy to see you here (truly).


  • adsaige gold member
    July 3

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    hm....this is a very good poem. i
    especially loved the reference to
    the nape of the neck. such a sensitive
    place for one lover to manipulate.

    i love this piece.

  • sOuL gold member
    June 27

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    A very good poem..why? because i felt the poem in my mind .. i read it and then i can hear it for long in my ear .. it has its own power to attract..