I remember the sound of it,
if I listen to the rain it paints me sheer,
an opalescence when I shone just for you
was there a time you noticed
tangled hair on your pillow
or how the light caught curtains
breeze stepping in to say hush
we were bathed in it,
exploring the intricate lines
and balance of it all
there was a finger of spine,
a vestige of thigh
and your lips
you left me colorless
faded from bloom
in satin seas
I danced figure eights,
flowing across alabaster
I was the zephyr
that whispered the secrets
of your purity
consciousness was lost
somewhere in sensual euphoria
like doves in silvered snow
we were stranded in each other
with only heat to melt us home
ivory dripped as pearls
rippled across the candescence
of impassioned crystals
and I harvested the promise of a sequel
Author notes
Photo Credit ~ "Calla Lily #6" by Marc Duke
A collaboration with Cannonsfire
Stanzas 1-4: Cannonsfire
Stanzas 5-7: Weltt
In a list
A contest entry
- Symphony In White by Mad Moon.
600 points, ended July 13, 2008, 13 entries
Silver trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Comments
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a great collab & a silver well deserved for you both...this was written with so much soul... well done
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It's easy when someone knows your soul as well as D does
C
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another triumph; you are such a fine poet, and i loved every bit of it
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Beautifully fresh use of langauge, just holds me spellbound in the amaranth of this poem. Incalescence magnifique! This should have garnered the gold... ~K
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lol psst K, it's ok, we wrote it because we love each other so much it was seamless...he completes whatever I write just perfectly sigh...
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congrats on the silver!
Amazing symphony of sensuality. I liked the doves melting themselves free of the snow -
Pretty silver things to add to your cabinet 
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Whew!! This is extraordinary! The imagery is stunning, The language stellar. A beautiful entry, indeed! Left me speechless AND breathless... Just WOW!! Thanks for this gorgeous entry, and Good Luck!
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Thank you so much for our silver, it was one of the most enjoyable collabs I have ever done
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We are very pleased you enjoyed it and your contest was such wonderful inspiration. Had a lot of fun!
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remarkable...this sounds and feels as if one person held the pen and the other both hearts. Beautifully done. Love, Lane
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Thanks Lane, and you have described us just as we feel sigh...
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This is beautiful and so sensual, it almost drips from the page.
An amazing collaboration between you two, your thoughts are very much in tune, it was seamless, almost written as one.
All the best in the contest, I don't think this needs luck...Sue
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Amazing
Bravo to both of you. This is a masterpiece.
Seamless blending of thoughts and emotion.
Superb!!!
wolf
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Thanks, it is easy to write with him
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good job
really like it
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nice duo
well written by both . . liked the flow . . also "if I listen to the rain, it paints me sheer" and "ivory dripped as petals" . . good luck in the contest . .
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What a lovely collaboration..It is like dreamy kind of write..Best of luck to both of you Ruby
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Thanks Ruby, seems we had the same dream at the same time lol
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wow what an awesome touching light and sensual collaboration my brother..Cannonsfire is such a gifted writer and I am sure you feel all the more prouder for writing with her, for both of you producing such a wonderful delight of a read
Cind
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He is my inspiration Cin, so enjoy the collabs with him
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awww
beautiful
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I came back to read this again... I like it more every time I read. Juls
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lol and I like him er it more each time I read it too lololol
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What a beautiful collaboration this is...it's like a dance back and forth describing a beautiful image..I don't need to see the picture but rather picturing it in my mind of what it's like...again amazingly done thank you for sharing this with us
Keep penning!!!
Lieu
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Thanks
it's starting to feel as if there was no end or beginning in this, just two hearts on the same wavelength. That's why i think it feels seamless and timeless. Wellt does that
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lol indeed true too that ...and of course it shouldn't if it'll ever stop then the creativity and talent wouldn't be there any longer...
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Thank you for such a lovely comment and we are glad that you liked it. It is so easy to be inspired by her and to create a shared moment.
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Amazing how you put this poem together with such a variety of the same conceptual image. And, extremely white too!
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Thank you, Weltt and I think very much alike and I sent him my piece and then he did his, it is an extremely good fit..doesn't happen very often with collabs unless your partner is extremely talented and he is...he is very talented. Love, C
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Thank you for your time and thought Rovingone. We had a lot of fun writing this one and it good to see people enjoying it.
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I like playing with you
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They like us! They really like us
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Beautiful wqrite here
This is truly a wonderous write with a viaion often overlooked yet there in its purest form left untainted yet alive
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Thank you for stopping buy! We're so happy people are enjoying or words.
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Very lovely, great use of jewels and objects rich with rarity.
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Thank you! Yeah they worked very well to keep the white theme going too! thank you for your thoughts!
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OH MY! What more can one say when reading such a perfect piece of poetry.......this is what we poets strive for. Breath taking! I loved it from start to finish and the picture suits the piece amazingly.
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Indeed we are. Thank you for your kind words of encouragement and appreciation.
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Such a lovely comment, Dan and I are thrilled so many are enjoying this piece. Love, C
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This is fantastic.
played along well lol...yes pun intended
Love you both
Passions
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Thanks, it is easy to work with someone who inspires me
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A very fine write indeed. I loved the imagery which you painted. Thanks for sharing this one with us. Again, well done.
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bravo
A highly poetical and most evocative piece of poetry here! Wonderfully warm and sharp images throughout...a most splendid poem and fine collaboration! bravo... bravo.. bravo.. -
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Thank you for the comment. We are glad our poem has met such high praise and that people found enjoyment in it. Fun one to write for sure!
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wow this is absolutely beautiful...the imagery successfully paints a vivid picture! great work!
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Thank you very much!! Cannonsfire painted a beautiful picture and I merely framed it.
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Oh wow.. gorgeously sensual in the most perfect way!! What a stunning collab!!!
Outstanding!!!
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awwww thanks, Weltt is a master of understated sensuality lol I just followed meekly Love, C
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awww thanks C. I just try to copy Jacks. j/k
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lol she's a good sister
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she has my real sister beat so yeah that's pretty good! I cherish her thoughts.
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Thank you sis!! Your my foremost expert on sensual so if it meets your approval that is a compliment indeed. Thank you for stopping by.
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I did not really ntice any stylistic change between the two halves, so well done on that score. It is a pity the poem is marred by a major grammatical error: "when I shined just for you"; the past tense of "to shine" is "shone".
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After we took another look at this and read into what she meant in that line we realized what you were saying here and have since changed it. Thank you for pointing this out and making us take a deeper look into our piece.
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Thank you for taking the time to leave a thoughtful comment.
However "shined" is also an acceptable form of the word here.
http://dictionary.reference.com/browse/shine
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How interesting to find an illiterate dictionary!
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'Lustre' is a sexy word. I'm not sure why, it just is.
Jesus, this entire poem reeks of sensual...kiwigirljacks could have written it...HAHAHAHA, but it's very nicely done.
"paints me sheer"
Like this...sounds poetic.
"an opalescence when I shined just for you"
'Opalescence'...one of those words you can never use in real life. :/ But nice!!
That second stanza feels like song lyrics...pretty cool.
"I was the zephyr
that whispered the secrets
of your purity:
Wow, you are dirty if my interpretation is accurate. 'Zephyr' is an awesome word!!
"and I harvested the promise of a sequel"
Kick-ass ending (if not totally dirty...I mean sensual)
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HAHAHA.. I'm taking that as a huge compliment cause this write rocked!!
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Of course...! You and your sexual innuendos...
HAHA
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It was quite the adventure
Thank you for the comment!
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lol It was damn hot collaboration...still fanning off the steam LOL
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I know you guys have put in the AN's who wrote what, but it flows so smoothly you cannot tell where one stops and the other starts.
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Agreed, C. set me up for an easy transition.
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I think we were beautifully in sync
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Beautiful
It flows well and I like that it's a subtle sensual. Its very nicely written.
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Thank you for reading and leaving a thoughtful comment!
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This is too beautiful for words, the way your words flow and seem to swoop and dive with each line. Thoughts of love were so perfectly portrayed in this sweetly sensual write.
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Absolutely Maahvahlous!
I love the poem's title, and the message you've portrayed. This beautifully thoughtful and sensitive piece brings to mind the closeness of soulmates in love especially as we encounter our lives within one another every day as we live our lives on earth. 
Thank you for sharing! As they say here on AP, write on, shine on, Poets!! Oh, yes, best of luck in the contest!!! Peace, Cyn
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It was all C. I just tried to keep up with her brilliance! Thank you for the wonderful comment!
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Stop selling yourself short, this was a mere short piece of phrases until you added the subtlety that made it so passionate an answer. Love, Chez
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A good collaboration, flows well from one poet to the other maintaining the sensual feeling and and poetry throughout
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A most beautiful collaboration, wonderfully flowing and smooth throughout. The imagery moves well between one poet to the other, truly captivating! A sweet and endearing write indeed. Bravo you two; this was awesome!!!
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Awww, Weltt makes it easy to pen sensuality.
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Thank you so much!!
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wow such beauty and wonder reigns within your words and heart. you both did an awesome job as the imagery just melts into the mind and visions voiced.superb dear thanx for sharing this work of art xx Love Star xx
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Thank you star for the wonderful comment and I'm glad you enjoyed it!
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I thank you for such lovely comments and I know Weltt will too
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awwww beautifully done, you know i loved it
wonderful and good luck to the both of you wonderful writers
take care
stephanie
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Awww thanks hun, Dan gives a girl so much inspiration that the light is always white that shines...glad you enjoyed it. Love, C
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hahaha he always gives me a headache
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lol haven't had to pretend one yet LOL
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what?
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hehe I mean his sensual pen...haven't got sick of it quite yet lmao..
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but almost?
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Not even close
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you are funny
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