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Lonely night

 

 

Woman… why do you hide
the beauty you hold inside.
Sly-est smile

reveals your yearning heart.

Please, set your spirit
Free…Come out…..
Stay this night
With me.

Woman… why do you weep
for another
who cut so deep.
My kind hands
will warm tenderly.

Please, set your spirit
Free…Come out….
Stay this night
with me.

Woman.. look this way
I am the other half

Who prepares a lovers feast
for you.
I ask,  be tender
and ever so merciful too.

Please, set your spirit
Free…Come out…
Stay this night
with me…

 

My aching heart

longs this lonely night

for only

you. 

 

Author notes

Contest prompt: I truly scored with sent lyrics!
Eric Johnson..incredible guitarist,
song: Lonely in the night.
link: http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=qrs6I1FPClw

electric guitar in this song is outrageous!
Thankyou poet for such a great inspiration.

I hope you like it...i tried to appeal to her heart.

When a woman's heart has been burnt like toast...
we do not like to come out and play,
for the heart is leary and full of distaste.
I do recall after my divorce saying:
from now on...Men are in my file labeled amusement,
and handyman repair. ouch!....my hubbie had to wooo my
heart carefully....i was protective and cautious,
and how he got me to marry is absurd!

A former recruiter, i put him on an agreed upon probationary
period with a review! omg! he still teases me, oh for heaven's
sake if I disagree, will this appear on my review!
"Damn straight it will!" now ..he's getting wise, asking if
i ever am subject to review? (hell no)
lol ( well, maybe)don't tell anyone okay!

picture credit: talented artistry print of allposters.com,
where this picture is available for affordable purchase and
lovely framing too!








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  • Angelflower
    July 2, 2008
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    This was just so tender.. I really loved this.. And the image was just so soft.. I'm just so amazed by this and the wonderful emotion that you wrote in your words!! you did so great granny dear.. thank you very much for sharing this.. Best of luck!!


    Angel

  • Improv Machinery
    June 28, 2008
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    i love the picture you put with it too

  • Improv Machinery
    June 28, 2008

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    lovely take on the song hun. you never cease to amaze me. i like how you wrote from the male perpective. you have inspired me. i will be trying to write from the perspective of the opposite sex, i think something magical might happen, as did with this write. here is normally where i would point out my favorite part but i cant put my finger on just one, i love the whole write. excellently done.
    Rob


  • penman gold member
    June 28, 2008

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    Powerful

    Strikes the soul with the depth of ache when solitude feels so lonely. Great take on the lyrics. Best of luck in the contest.

  • Improv Machinery
    June 27, 2008
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    http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=qrs6I1FPClw heres the link

  • Improv Machinery
    June 26, 2008
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    it isnt letting me send links right now, but your song is called Lonely In The Night by Eric Johnson, its linked on my page.

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