Midsummer and evening falls
Listen as Queen fairy calls
Nymphs and Shepherds come away
Moonlight shines so we can play.
Shooting stars fly to the sea
Light the sky so we can see
Unicorns fly through the sky
Whinnies heard as they pass by
Wings of gossamer take flight
Carry dreams throughout the night
It's Midsummer can't you tell
Fairies fly and all is well.
A contest entry
- Winklings Celebrates its 100th Contest (A Series) - Contest J by Lyndon.
3500 points, ended August 5, 2008, 10 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
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Comments
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Simple titling and form.
The rhyme too keeps to the basics
making the whole verse easy to digest.
There's nice scenery given and plenty
of tie-in's to magic found.
"Whinnieing" isn't a word as far as
I could find~may I suggest:
"Whinnies heard as they pass by"?
Ending with "all is well" completes the
scene with contentment. Although "fairy's"
should be fairies as it is used. Blue -
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Thankyou
Many thanks for your tips, I found them most helpful
, Ros
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