An Ode to Magic
A hardened focus shifts the beam of will
becoming narrow circles of thought.
That lasting change brings chaos until,
resolved, the energy balance is sought.
A mages way is his to fully know,
in its mystique should he be versed.
For magic shows a disciplined mind
that only he in mastered strength can grow.
Desire gives his focused talents, diverse,
that power forfeit from mundane of blind.
Directly, illustrate your magic’s way.
Intentions guide the mage’s final grace.
As what is given weight, some chance to sway
realities darkened, mindless embrace.
Diseased the thoughts of souls in shackled heat,
their magic system floods decayed slow death
its poison seeps into the willed fabric
of those so lost to deep hypnotic beat.
This act becomes in its last final breath
an evil played by selfish fools mind trick.
He conceives an image in solid form
creating ideal thought in matter’s way.
The energy of true eye comes to storm
as its held in will power’s mighty sway.
Released to voids in vacuums nether grip
Obtuse shadows shall lift from lights high beams
as dark so flees from substance lit in love.
Waters flow from beneath the phantom ship
moving visions which propel magic’s dreams.
The mystic speaks, “ below will change above”
Author notes
A three stanza Ode in iambic pentameter
ababcdecde
A contest entry
- Love is the Law, Love under Will by SchizoChic.
450 points, ended September 29, 10 entries
Gold trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Criticize freely, I need input to improve
Comments
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The combination of strict meter, rhyme and overall imagery makes this worthy of a gold trophy (I didn't read the contest!)
To see things clearly in this maelstrom world requires the focus of which you speak. To weaker, short-sighted minds, there will only be darkness to command:
'He conceives an image in solid form
creating ideal thought in matter’s way.
The energy of true eye comes to storm'
The last three lines bring the word 'perception' to mind...how we see things is how they are.
This is one that you like to read again to see how many interpretations are possible..there are so many images...I guess it's a test of our mind's strength
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Very nice,
Mordegast
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This is one of the only poems so far that understand what the contest is all about. Props to you! Fabulous write. Best of luck in the contest.
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I felt the meter in even beat all the way through this. An ode this be, the language and sing-song
flow leave no doubt. Wonderful topic that never
fails to draw me in! Blue
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love the last line! -
your a witch? oh good golly miss molly I do not do these forms either. It is lovely 10
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Wow, this is a bit deep! I think you may have been reading some of Uncle Aleister's work. Definitely a bit of change in conformity with the will. This could almost be a manual for magickal will-power. It even flows with a measured power. 'As above so below, so below as above' or is it the other way around? After reading this I am going to practice teleportation or other super-powers. Excellent!
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Ode's are so beautiful...I am always impressed with anyone how can write them...this is very mystical and magical...you used the four elements so very well and so very sublime...I am not be reading this right, so let me know, please...but I feel it has a lot of undertones to something deeper and more spiritual...
Lovely work for sure...
Love,
mystic
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I am not familiar with forms - so to me, this was perfect. I like the depth and mysticism within this - my AP twin, Azlyn, is well-knowledgable in things of this type - alas, I am fairly ignorant....lol
But I like what I think you are saying - that a thought is just a thought until you make it real.
I love your wording, even though I don't fully understand it all.
Well done!
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You...are a very wise poet....
I am a humble learning and struggling soul..practicing
each day...I lack discipline of structure...
where as you are glaring diamond reflection...
all this poem needs is a little fantasy air....
truly important you add air so we float along with you.
Let loose a little more with less clever and
stick with minimal....so we taste your simile..smell
it..want it for our own.
understand?
ears/Seattle
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