Once upon a time
I was enticed into their arms
Willingly I followed them to places
Insanity led us to
Madness was our companion
When we entered the foveas
And I was solidified by the spell
Castigated by their monologues
Fascinated, assimilating, paralyzed
From that day on I was to abide
Never queried the imperative
Marveled at whatever they'd yield
My soul was to atrophy
Its colours have been their reward
For the life without prospect
I was condemned to live
Soon all inside was stained black
Colours a myth of past times
That seemed to lay before this lifetime
Beyond all that I ever was
One day I counted
The time that had elapsed,
The days I had served
In this meaningless eternity
Whispering: 10,000 days are enough...
Time to take on the trail back
Brace up and head for light
Opposed to the rashly way in
... it will be a long way home
A contest entry
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WOW!
This poem just grabbed me and pulled me right in, there was no way I was going to have any distractions until I made it to the end. Really impressive read you gave me here, and only a fighter as your self would role up your sleeves and tie up your boots for that long way home. Dark, but not left without a struggle and a light in the distance... Bravo!
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Dark...loved the way this poem just read so easily! Down to that last line that really sticks in my mind!!!
Blessed be~
Az
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Wonderful Poem!!!
I think we all get trapped by our demons now and then. Luckily for most it is only temporary and we see the light at the end of the tunnel. Your words were very heartfelt and your imagery brought the reader along on your journey. You take care.
Bless You,
Sandy
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Great use of the prompt....dark and poigantly sad. Speaks of the long road home in fateful pictures. Well done and good luck...
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Excellent take on the prompt, was a dark journey indeed. The last stanza was poigant and most heart felt. Well thought out and constructed for impact. Great work and good luck.
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