Through stained glass windows the sun streams in,
with patterns dancing on every face;
from the innocent, to those with sin.
Everyone there to garner some grace.
But the heart is where grace must be found,
and through our deeds is how it's shown.
Fertile and grateful must be the ground,
for love to blossom and be full grown.
Catholicism is not always the key.
A Muhammadan woman had such heart,
Our Lady of Fatima said that she,
"In heaven, will have the greatest part!"
So when you see a bum on the street,
holding a cardboard, asking for bread;
remember it's God's son that we meet,
"Whatsoever you do", Jesus said.
For many sins charity covers,
with this, many a sinner has turned Saint.
Don't be haters, turn into lovers,
in the stain glass windows, your face paint.
Author notes
I believe that heaven can be attained by anyone. It all depends on the heart...what's in it, whether it's filled with hope or bitterness...hate or forgiveness! It's not what religion you're in...it's what spirit you have!
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Comments
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Paint your face with the light from the stained glass windows... I love that image! I'm imagining people on their knees at prayer with their faces upturned and the light streaming in on them... Really cool imagery here, I love it! And you're right on with your message, too. Great write
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This is a sincerely written piece...
But I do have to say that, to me, the rhythm falters in some places and I find the inversion in the final line a little awkward. Putting the object before the verb in poetry is nowadays considered to be "old-fashioned". My own feeling is that it is still acceptable for special effects, but that one should try to avoid doing so simply to force a rhyme - and the line does rather give the impression that this is what has happened here.
Do try to give more attention to technique. Remember, however sound and uplifting your ideas, it is to a large extent the skilful use of poetic technique (rhyme, rhythm etc) that will make a poem "speak" not only to the readers' intellect but to the deeper levels of the psyche.
So do please work on your technique!
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I agree with you about religion. It's what is in your heart that counts. Thanks for sharing this.
trekkergirl
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An excellent write indeed!
I especially enjoyed the first and last stanzas. A very ecumenical poem; I enjoyed the use of the picture of Our Lady of Guadalupe, my patronness. Those last two lines might be arranged for more punch to the message, such as a semi-colon after 'haters'; overall it's one of the best ecumenical spiritual poems I've read. It just seems to lack luster from the rest of the poem at the very end....
Thank you indeed for entering!
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Thank you for this fitting contribution. The philosophy you describe here is very interesting, and I appreciate how you were able to put it into a well phrased poem. Thank you for entering.
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I love the way you mention other religions without being insulting. This is an amazing poem. I really enjoyed the final stanza most. great write!
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fantastic
i loved it. the fourth stanza is my fave.
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Masterful
I tip my hat to you.Incredibly gifted.Your mothers spirit shines through you and it is well received. -
Why, this is wonderful. I mean it. There are so many thoughts just bursting with wisdom throughout.
And the form and rhymes are very well executed
I just love, love LOVE the last two lines.
Overall, you have given a personal view of
faith without extricating other ones.
Observations:
"and through our deeds is how it (is) sown"<-- think you may have wanted that in there if not the contraction 'it's'.
Why not let go of most of the punctuation? Prose is more restricted and needs it, but poetry has to 'f l y '.
Nice poem with gems of good spirit! Thank you.
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I don't usually go for religious poems, but this one was great! The rhyming was well done, and I like how you incorporated some allusions into the poem as well... loved the last stanza. Thanks for entering my contest.
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You blew me away with this peice, it's absolutely magnificent. I personally wouldn't change anything about it.
Thank you for such a good write.
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wow.
this is a great poem!
thankx for enterin my contest!
best of luck to you!!
+!~Confused CRow~!+
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I've been on both sides of charity now. And I must say it's harder to think that giving is better than receiving when you're hungry or homeless or both. I don't give a damn what religion you pratice as long as you're character preaches what it pratices. Good luck in the contest.
Sincerely,
Leo Long
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i really like that with the heat is where grace must be found - my name means grace and i sigh with that. i have been thinking religious thoughts for the last few weeks and it is getting me into madness.
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You took me into the truths of your sacred thoughts through the words your brought here ...they are enlightening indeed...
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And so true. When we give them a glass of water, when we feed those who are hungry, shelter those who are without, we are doing it for him. Very well thought out poem with intense feeling. Excellent.
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Oh if we could all turn into lovers what a wonderful world it would be! Good message! ***Pam***
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Very lovely... the image of patterned colors playing over saint and sinner... it shows no preference as does the love you speak of... Well done...
Ken
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this is a very beautiful write. I love stained glass windows for one and for two it paints a wonderful message. I really don't care for poems about religion and such but i really enjoyed reading this. your rhyme was perfect and it flowed so well. I enjoyed this poem very much. Great write keep on penning
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thank you for sharing this beautiful story::: and creatively written. Good luck in the contest and I enjoyed reading this poem. Love, prettypoetry
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Beautiful write and so true
You speak such truth here and yes I have found in my lifetime that the poor are more willing to give for they too have known hunger and homelessnes at times .They see the pain of others and so they share no matter how little they may have .For in their hearts they know someone will help them in the same way someday
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