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Because You Killed Me

If you only knew what it was you've done to me
If you could only see the pain inside my head
And under my skin
The venom you've given me kills
Every hour and every day I am sick inside
An illness caused by the love you gave me
I watched it all along
Not realizeing your true intentions

What a shame I could not see
So now the church bells ring
Because you killed me

Bitterness brought me to my knees
I had heard enough lies never enough truth
I had to beg you to stay
I had to beg you to never let me down
That plea was never answered
You killed me inside with attacks on my emotions
Alcohol and butterflies this is all I could see in the end
No sympathy for me and no remorse do you feel

What a shame I could not see
So now the church bells ring
Because you killed me

A quiet scene
On my knees
In tears
Shattered glass surrounds me
He has left yet again left me alone
To fend for myself
Now he will see
Whats really inside of me

What a shame I could not see
So now the church bells ring
Because you killed me

White light reaches my eyes
Illuminating tears of rage sorrow and passion
Shard of glass in my hand
I have broken inside this is all that will be
Veins sliced open
Crimson flowing releasing the inner turmoil
Theres no coming back
This is all I know now

What a shame I could not see
So now church bells ring
Because you killed me

Author notes


Its amazing what relationships can do to people

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  • eternitydemon
    September 16, 2008
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    thank you for entering my contest.


  • Venus25
    September 15, 2008

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    The power of love!

    Excellent flow my dear...

    A very emotional poem, I really felt your pain in this! What a shame I could not see
    So now the church bells ring
    Because you killed me... the repetition of this stanza works very well indeed!

    Best of luck to you



  • SincerelyMegan
    September 13, 2008

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    This deserves recognition.
    Well done.

    I love how you repeated-
    "What a shame I could not see
    So now the church bells ring
    Because you killed me"

    It made it flow together.

    Great job.


  • BrokenDawn
    August 12, 2008

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    Wow simply stunning there is so much honest emotion in this piece. Thanks for entering and good luck!
    ~dawn♥


  • LittleDecoy
    August 7, 2008

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    freakin fantastic poem.
    the emotions are crazy coming off the screen as i'm reading it.
    i felt like i was you just from your choice of wording and great imagery.
    awesome job! loved the whole thing.
    thanks for entering & good luc


  • xCandieKissesx
    August 5, 2008

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    Emotions!

    You killed me inside with attacks on my emotions
    Alcohol and butterflies this is all I could see in the end
    No sympathy for me and no remorse do you feel

    Awesome lines filled with imagery and depth! Great job and good luck!


  • maralisa silver member
    July 31, 2008

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    You killed me inside with attacks on my emotions
    Alcohol and butterflies this is all I could see in the end No sympathy for me and no remorse do you feel
    a very deep and powerful poem full of strong sad emotions all the way through good luck in the contest


  • The.Tango.Emily
    July 30, 2008
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    I liked this.
    Thank you for entering my contest


  • Georgia La Mariposa
    July 30, 2008
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    I loved this Goodluck in the contest hun xx


  • mcrfan322
    July 26, 2008

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    pretty good poem... i liked the words and the fraising and really felt what u felt... i really cont say much else about this poem... just that it was a good poem... i hope you win and best of luck to you... keep on writing


  • RawrSmileBabyPlz
    June 26, 2008
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    Okay.

    Some parts in this was kinda bad. And stole my name shame on you j.k its from ohio is for lovers. I think in this "If you only knew what is was you've done to me" the is is suppose to be IT. But anyways very well written and i liked it alot. thanks for entering my contest i wish you the best of luck..
    ..<3..
    Shelly

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