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Emotionless Salvation

Standing suffocation
as wax wings
melt in the
candle of a dream
broken-

Bearing devastation
as you breathe
sterile air and
hollow contrition-

Longing for salvation
as tears cried
over broken skin
burns itself
into jagged lines
of emotionless
rivers-

Author notes

this is from a few months back, around jan. or so...

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  • Swan song gold member
    July 15, 2008
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    wow!!!!!!


  • Akimbo
    July 8, 2008

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    Wow!

    This poem immediately reminded me of this one by our mutual friend:
    http://allpoetry.com/poem/2292697
    It's one of my favorites, hauntingly beautiful and I got the exact same vibe from this.
    Thanks, Kj

    • greyhaime
      July 8, 2008
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      yeah that is one of my favs from her s well..
      thanks for the comparison,,,


  • LionessK gold member
    June 29, 2008
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    i just wanted to use that one

  • LionessK gold member
    June 28, 2008
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    o.o
    see... my brain... kick it.


  • LionessK gold member
    June 28, 2008

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    hm...
    there is too much here to take in all at once. This is one of the poems you have to come back to and read again. .. or maybe that's just me. maybe my brain just need a kick to start... or something.
    I'll stop rambling.


  • Disturbed Prodigy
    June 28, 2008

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    there is some much in one word that, i see why people tell other to choose them so carefully, keep it flowing and good luck in the contest

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