with trembling hands,
you held folded truth;
a card full of nothing
but my signature
A contest entry
- Quickie-PIF-Prompt-10x15 words by Cannonsfire.
900 points, ended June 26, 2008, 8 entries
Bronze trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
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Congrats on thy Bronze =]
You are talented...
I love "trembling hands" & the images it has--trembling because of dread for the news...or knowledge of the imminent news?
"but my signature"
I like that you separate this from the other lines...it has a measured effect.
You are probably the most talented poet near my age...all these 13/14/15/16-year-olds write some disgusting things I can hardly read...I am pleased you are not one of them.
I need to read more of your stuff
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Well deserved trophy my friend. Pizzaburgers on me...
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On yes and congrats babe on your cup!
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yay congrats on the bronze
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There is something dark here...I can't quite put my finger on why I feel that way, but there is. Maybe a little sadness too. It's "the card full of nothing" line. This is short and well done. No crits. That I can see at least. Nice work Tyler.
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That's because you actually understood the allegory. [unlike the others...] lol
Woohoo!
it's about literally the invitation & the lust aspect -- but then there's a different meaning, basically that I have nothing to say to the person [because that's all he wanted: a fuck buddy.]
Thanks for the comment.
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Fuck buddies are never the way to go. Most times you end up feeling like a cheap slut, used and abused. I have always been good at seeing underneath. Reading the shadows. Welcome to the lovely world of shithouse humanity, heh?
And you are welcome.
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haha thanks for the welcome. lol
you know, the one guy i do meet that is genuine, has to move up to alabama. that totally sucks!
i mean there are other genuine guys but man, they suck at conversation. there's no one else i really click with.
ha. but yeahhh hopefully that will change.
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All in time. I think it's all a matter of luck, really. I'll keep my fingers crossed for you though. Of course. Sometimes it's good to be a loner as well. It gives you lots of poetic and creative freedom.
But yes, that will change eventually.
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Wonderful invitation...well written..All the best!
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ooohhh, this is deep and beautiful, i really love this
wonderful write and good luck
take care
stephanie
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Oh well I like this goodluck in the contest best wishes and many blessings
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Ooh!!! this was really good!!! very unique!!! You did a great job! best of luck!!
Angel
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Oh my, now that is hot! I love it! Love, C
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