I went to your father and asked for your hand
Your Dad said just take her, but please understand
She can't cook your food, and she won't wash your floor
So I spun on my heel and made for the door;
Bye now - its been nice to meet you
Bye now - its been nice to greet you
But quite a while since I've been home
And I better be getting along.
Well, I was at home having a ball
From outside my door I heard a voice call
The family was there, so was the gun
"You'll marry my daughter, I'll call you son"
Hi now - its been nice to meet you
Hi, now - its been nice to greet you
You'll soon be making a family home
So we better get moving along.
The chapel was full from the front to the back
The best man was holding a gun in my back
All of my friends tried to kiss the new bride
But I rushed her right past when we went outside
Bye now - its been nice to meet you
Bye now - its been nice to greet you
Its time to show my new wife her home
So we better get moving along.
Now we were happy for quite a few years
Four children she gave me - cute little dears
But the Lord in his wisdom was kind to me not
Our love died away and love was forgot.
Now that she's has left me; I still wonder why;
But I hear the words she said as goodbye.
Bye now - its been good to know you
Bye now - its time to show you
Now's the right time to make my own home
So I better be moving along.
The kids stayed with me for two or three years
Then came the peak of all of my fears
They went the way that all children do
They left me to start their own lives anew.
Bye now - its been good to know you
Bye now - we just have to show you
We are quite ready to make our own homes
So we better be moving along.
Now I'm alone with no one to care
There's no one at home to welcome me there
There's no one I know with affection to give
Will I be lonely as long as I live?
Bye now - its been good to know you
Bye now - it just goes to show you
Love everlasting is just a pipe dream
So I better be moving along.
I took to drinking to ease all my pain,
But I felt much worse when I sobered again.
Will I be unhappy,sarcastic and mean?
Will I find love and be merry and keen?
Or will I get drunk again and again.
Will someone please help me to ease all that pain.
Bye now - its been good to meet you
Bye now - its been good to greet you
Its a long long time since I had a home
But I gotta be moving along.
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AN - Option 1 - Poems 69 - I love poetry
Author notes
Way back there was a C&W song called "So Long". This poem was written in imitation of So Long. I can't remember the singer's name. I like all C&W singers but Ferlon Husky, Merle haggard had songs that were special to me.
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Could this be real ? You be the judge.
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I remember that song. We use to sing it when i was a kid...if it's the same one. I loved this piece. The story was quite intriguing and funny in places to begin with, but then it became sad when the poor guy was left alone with the bottle. Bad choice for a companion. Excellently put across and showed that this can actually be the way things are in reality. (don't know about shitgun marriages anymore though). Loved it to pieces. Thanks for the read and the laugh.
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this was meant to be a reflecion of life, the godd, the bad and the ugly. It seems to have achieved its purpose. Needs a bit of editing and some one with a guitar to sing it.
So glad you enjoyed it and saw the reality of it all. I agree that shotgun weddings are a thing of the past now.
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This is very unique! This stands out from the other pieces I have read for my contest. Normally catchy pieces like this are filled with joy. I loved you executed this from beginning to end. It is sort of comic at the beginning..
Towards the end we start to see the darkness and the sadness left behind. You described your feelings very well and I truly enjoyed this read. Perhaps its time for someone to get a puppy?
Good luck. ♥
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Thank you for your very perceptive comment. It was a time in my life i prefer to ignore usually, but I guess it has a place in memory anyway. I am well and truly over it all now, life moves on.
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this is a sad sorta song!! but a very good peice anyway!!
best of luck
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C&W songs are usually sad. This one is no different. Thank you for commenting.
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Wow, I really like this. Even though the story is sad, it is still fun to read. I like how after each story you slightly change the chorus just enough so that it pertains to the situation. Great job!
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It was not easy to write in imitation of a very old C&W song but in a different vein. Thank you for your encouraging comments.
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You're welcome. You did a great job with it!
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Good write. I like the repetition. It's kind of catchy. I don't like some of the ideas behind it though. You should never leave a woman because she can't be a house wife. that's not right. Nor should you try to drink away your sadness. Get over it. Deal with it. Emrace it. But don't try to hide it. Good write, though. It has intriguing ideas in it that make me want to read further
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None of this is real at all. If you think about it, it's a C+W song with a chorus and all. Many years ago there was a C+W song called "So Long" or something like that, this is more or less an imitation of that song. I am pleased that it has elicited such a response from you. Thank you for taking the time to comment.
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I enjoyed reading this. A little sad & poignant yet it flows & scans beautifully. The rhyme scheme is good as well. It looks like a lot of work went into composing this.
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Thank you my friend. There was a lot of thought in this one. It sat around for ages before it jelled into its present form. I am pleased you enjoyed it.
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Thanks for following the rules! I'll comment for reals later. :
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Brings to mind a familiar refrain. A damn good piece of work shot gun weddings and all. Thanks for being a contestant and happy trails
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The theme is a common one but the treatment is mine only. So is the story behind the poem. Thanks David.
Stay well.
Bob
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This is a very interesting piece, that's for sure. I had a very interesting time reading this and good luck in the contest.
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Life is different for each of us, this poem represents a snapshot of the variables of a life. Thank you for your comment and I am pleased that you found the poem interesting. Cheers and best wishes.
Bob
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This is very much a reality for a few.
I hear a tune by Woody Guthry (USA.. dirty thirties)while hearing myself read this.
This is my new favorite piece of your work.
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The tune you hear is probably one called,"So Long its been good to know you" I don't know who the artist was but the era is about right. I am quite pleased that you liked it so much. Sadly it is a reality for a few. I wonder just how many and what would it take from some of us to give them a hand up out of the gutter. Not a lot, I think, just have to get the timing right.
Thank you for reading and commenting. Like everyone else i need a bit of encouragement now and then. All of us oldies have had so many experiences we must all have a couple of novels somewhere. Just getting them on paper is the problem.
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Hey Bob
I think you just described many older guys with the wonderful and humorous piece of poetry. I know I see me here. Excellent write my friend.
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We old guys have probably been close to this state a few times. Thank you for the encouraging comments. They help to keep the pen working.
Cheers.
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