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Echoes Mock the Forsaken Heart

lips shaded in pomegranate hues,
ripe cantaloupe in velvet swells.
hues boggle in blushes cream,
complex stream, of incalculable math
defined in oblique muscle.

overlaid in honey and ginger tones
from sun's glaze 'pon freckle.
irises contained in fan of lash
lowered slightly from glare.
faint of whisper no words bespeak
of the trembling in her.

wax and wane of moon cycles,
renewal and decay in lies
of oleander dreams, on paper-mache
draped, swathed in robes drag.
defined between self researched
goodbyes.

theban, celestial, runic scripts
talismans drawn to learn
the ogham etched to bleeding
candles red and pink to burn-low
little solace, meditative peace
in totem dark of moon.

artfully raised arm, poised above
cauldron of incense below...
cleansed free from wrath due pain
dragged from the veil, before Her
kissed blue star between the eyes.
by breath and harmony pushed-
shocked back into self the vessel.

wiped tears, shoved free from restraint
gelded passion withheld, she weeps.
loneliness echoed in gulps tirade
frozen test, of near death in realm.

nine worlds she visits through tree,
travels now nearly effortlessly.
mere thought, near a pond she lands
waiting, waiting, lover's whispered echo...

though faint, the hopeful taint
of the mind, wishing through jaded
dreams, she still Believes...

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  • individuality gold member
    July 31

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    a steamy piece of poetry here i thought, i was either thinking of sex or food when reading, both brilliant, can i have seconds.

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  • Blue Rew silver member
    July 15

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    This one can be taken as a personal write or one
    that directs attention to magical traits found
    in the divine feminine...I believe its a bit of
    both. The colours here give access to a higher
    level of sensory. Visual and yet mysterious, it
    draws the reader in deep, intimate giving a
    tantalizing view of what it means to be a conduit,
    a soul open to all the elements of life. Blue

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  • Hakon
    July 13

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    That's one powerful path you walk, if indeed. I could be off the mark, but this at least in my limited experience, sounds vaguely like the stages and trials of a priestess(???) It is well written, with depth and scope. Most certainly this comes from your heart, as well as your mind.

  • sOuL gold member
    June 29

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    i have read this poem twice, i took more time on the second time than first, i tried to feel it in my heart and i felt it. What a great poem it is. I wish to read more from you.

    Specially the stanza i mentioned below
    is the best

    wiped tears, shoved free from restraint
    gelded passion withheld, she weeps.
    loneliness echoed in gulps tirade
    frozen test, of near death in realm.

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  • quantumsurveyor
    June 29

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    Such a range of beautifully articulated words and ideas. Not too sure that "boggle" fits the idea of hues in cream though.

  • whos my humblepie
    June 27

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    The font is lookin a little sweeter today
    I was able to read the whole thing
    I believe it involves longing for love or for loneliness to leave?
    I'm going to take a verse at a time to study this, I want to find the full meaning, this is a lovely write deserving of such attention.

    did you know that if you look at this background from 20 feet away it look completely different?


  • toomysterious
    June 26

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    I loved the language, very beautiful, but I had trouble understanding the story. Beautiful background, too, but hard on old eyes.
  • Abnormal
    June 26

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    A fantastic poem. The background was excellent! The words you used made a brilliant picture, and it was really well written. I particularly liked the bit at the beginning "lips shaded in pomegranate hues,
    ripe cantaloupe in velvet swells.
    hues boggle in blushes cream,
    complex stream, of incalculable math
    defined in oblique muscle."
    Good job!

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  • DarkPrince
    June 26

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    really a great poem .. one thing i have to mention as it was strikingly obvious in this poem is ur fresh vocabulary providing u with uncommonly used words that flash light the meaning and helps drawing attention to meaning of true picture even more..

  • whos my humblepie
    June 26
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    I loved the background very much! But I found it extremely difficult to read because of the font you chose to use, even after hiding the background.
    The font makes it seem to busy for the eyes.

  • Viyanna Rosemarie
    June 26

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    the vocabulary you use in this write is refreshing. your words are magical. i pray that all her believing is not for nothing. thank you for sharing your talent with me today and i am looking forward to reading more from you in the near future. viyanna rosemarie

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  • Wayne Leon Learmond
    June 26

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    Stunning background. Brilliant poem as the words carried me away with it. Very very deep indeed. A wonderful literary piece. Well done my Sister. Very beautiful.

    With
    Dark
    Love
    Wayne Leon
    x


  • Piccola gold member
    June 26

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    you have such an awsome vocabulary. I am always stupified. I read and re-read then still don't get it sometimes. It always moves me to improve. This background is beautiful; I know you made it
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