I knew I wanted more, but I’ve always settled for less
I’ve been tearing through my thoughts
But my undecided heart is a complete mess
In my hand I hold the innumerous obscurities
Observing the current matter with you and me
& why you’re the only one who makes me feel this way;
Regretful only because you did the right thing
You were determined to stay, but you walked away.
A secret and deluding glance is about all I can take
But I won’t shatter and I promise I won’t break
& I know I should leave before my sense of reason is at stake
Otherwise I’ll find myself begging to turn back time
Your impeccant smile held more meaning and committed this crime.
When you whispered in my ear that beautiful love song
My head became such a delusional haze
I realized this emotion was too charmingly wrong
In your hand you hold the key to my mind
I can’t promise you’ll like what you find
But you’re the only one who holds me in a twisted suspense
Hurt & dismayed only because I’ve done the right thing
I wanted badly for you to stay, but I watched you walk away.
I’ve always wanted more, but still settle for less
I’ve been traveling through my thoughts...
This infatuation has to be put to rest.
A contest entry
- Backgrounds! ( to share) by Angelflower.
1100 points, ended June 28, 2008, 56 entries
Honorable mention
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - Q-R Song Titles! by xxRainbowDawnxx.
450 points, ended July 15, 2008, 6 entries
Silver trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
pleassse tell me what you think :]
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It's not always obvious what the right or wrong way to deal with these kind of things is, but I flip and overreact. I don't on most things. Someones injured, I've forgot something or whatever I'm calm but as far as jealousy/partners is concerned God do I have an eppy. Anyways, love this one. Sounds like it's me writing it, from the way I often feel.
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wowie that poem gave me a haze myself, I LOVE IT! It reminds me a lot like myself, ooh I'm getting excited wif your poems! Im gona go read more! ^-^
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Wonderful. Lots of emotion and hurt. Another great write!
Heh, the background makes me want to cry
So sad
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I really like this background.. You really did a wonderful job.. thank you very much for sharing..
Best of luck..
on to the poem
You really expressed a lot of emotion in your words.. they flowed so smoothly.. And the image was really heartfelt and touched the eyes with moister.. You really did a wonderful job.. I really enjoyed it.. Thanks for sharing.
Angel
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This was such a wonderful poem, I think I'll read it again ^^
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Thanks ! I'm glad you liked it :] <3
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I love how clearly the persons mind state is in this poem you can just tell what there going through and that's a really good quality in the poem! I love it Mandy keep it up!!!
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Sis I gotta say you never cease to amazed me the yearning and wanting for the person to stay..remembering all the things that both shared together and yet all ended in a haste..I love the last stanza so much meaning...Wonderful write as always
Keep penning!!!
Lieu
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Whyyy, thank you, sistah from another mistah
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lol why..sistah..I never knew that lol
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Wonderful
Okay, hoe, you need to stop writing such amazingly fantabulous poems because I just can't keep up with them all!! hahaha This was great!!
*But I won’t shatter and I promise I won’t break*
Damn well we won't! No more girl, no more.
*In your hand you hold the key to my mind
I can’t promise you’ll like what you find*
Ohmygod. BEST LINES IN THE WORLD!!! I lovvveeed that. Having the key to my 'mind' in place of 'heart' really turned the poem in a new direction -- I love the way you write! For seriously.
*Hurt & dismayed only because I’ve done the right thing
I wanted badly for you to stay, but I watched you walk away.*
I love that image. The image of a girl watching someone whom she knows isn't good for her anymore finally leave and put her to rest. God. Do you REALIZE how much we've really been through these past 2 and a half years?
Love you
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Hey sis!! ^_^
This poem is pretty amazzzing!
I love how you keep repeating the walk away. It really hammers it. I can feel your emotion and your love, but also pain here. I can relate totally.
"When you whispered in my ear that beautiful love song
My head became such a delusional haze"
Oh gosh how I remember this feeling... How I miss it truly.. One day I'll have this feeling again. :]
Great write, as always dear. :]
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