Now a snake's heart is revealed,
Now the poison has been found.
A devil who was well concealed,
and a dream thrust to the ground.
Talk! Why are you trying to break me now?
can't you leave me alone?
But sir, tell me this true tell me how,
can you come back like you're home?
Still you can not look at me in the eye.
You say you are to marry
so why waist time with the past which died?
Hurry boy, do not tarry.
Author notes
It's been a long day.
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Hoodwinked
Sounds like your heart has been in turnoil. Emotions show through strong and clear. In the third verse, third line, you have a typo, waist should be waste I think. -
Hood-Wink!
WOW! What a difference in tone and subject from some of your other poems! This is a sour, spurned woman! This is sorrow and sadness, supreme! Great write, great wording, super flow! This could be read aloud so beautifully! Do you ever read your poems to an audience? I think you should! They are ver pleasing and so well done!
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Okay, not so great. You should look it over.
Who is this about (if anyone)? Very weird. Looks like it's been a rather bizarre day for you... -
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Yeah it's not meant to be good. I'll send you an e_mail about what happened.
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I'm waiting...
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