Beggars' Bench

Oppressions' opportunity falters
dejectedly upon beggars' bench.

Cup empty as he dreams
of cool waters
to wash away the stench.

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20 word on picture prompt: Polish Beggar by luch e

A contest entry

PIF Quickie - - 10/20 by Noir mariposa...x. 550 points, ended June 25, 2008, 9 entries
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Noir mariposa...x
June 25, 2008

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Very beautifully penned. Imagery and writing is supburb
I love the flow of it.. fits nicely ^

Thank you for entering and I wish you the best of luck,
Claire x

natchstucco
June 25, 2008
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this is great, well done again. I knwo you beat the hell out of mine. great job.

FifthDove
June 25, 2008

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Wow, such depth I felt by the time I reached the ending. A very profound poetic piece here

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