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(pissed off at the world for going around again)

another second
another minute
another hour
another day
weeks,
months,
a year has passed
everything has changed
but nothing stays the same
a never ending cycle
of how things try to be
but nothing can be trusted
this foreign ground is shaking
i try but cannot stand

the sands of time have shifted

i reach further for your hand

i need to stand alone now

to get a grip on life

the real thing

.................

not the plastic imitation

these fools are so content with

can they not see

how their men drop like flies

the sugar coated poisen

they so willingly hand to their children

it isnt safe to breath the air outside

and inside we get beaten

so we hide

like the children we are

till we're torn so rudely

from our daydreams that we created

to distract ourselves from the violence

and are thrown

into the battle field that is

our dear society

to see if we can mold it

and create it all our own

some things never change....

Author notes

i wanted to write somthing meaningful, but i wasnt sure how to go about it... i have nothing to realy say about it...more later...

can you see my point or am i just ranting.....?.....again

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  • Hovels 2
    June 28, 2008

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    Wow just wow. The first half of this poem makes me think of a person being in a room, with nothing much to do. Time passes and all you see is them moving from one spot to the next, DOING NOTHING. Just waiting. Waiting for someone, something. Then the second half of the poem makes me think of things outside that little room, like world issues. Makes me thing of that person standing in front of a group of people expressing their views on certain subjects, like war.

    The one emotion that I feel in this poem is wanting. Wanting change in one's life and in society. Almost like inner and outer change. There are a lot of thoughts in this poem but its not confusing. At least, not to me. Even though the thoughts are different, they somehow connect.

    Amazing.


    • XxshadowprincessxX
      June 29, 2008
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      wow....are you stalking me?

      that was a wonderfull interpretation...i love the little room that is very similar to what i was thinking...your like exactly on target...you've given it new light...thank you! Realy i mean it...!
      sammi

      • Hovels 2
        June 29, 2008
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        You're welcome. I like sharing my insight on poems. Most of the time, I may be wrong from what the writer was actually trying to express but I'm glad that sometimes I can be right on track with the author.


  • LovesPlayToy
    June 26, 2008
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    this was great!!!


  • XxshadowprincessxX
    June 25, 2008
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    i need to cut this down and make it stick to like one topic...i might get rid of it altogether....oh,well

  • anon053641
    June 25, 2008

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    it's a bit of a rant but there's are lots of good points.... and i guess there is a main one too.... I did like it though

    well done

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