If you've got questions i need to hear
please just ask me,dont dissapear.
I know your past has been very tough
to me your a diamond cut from the rough
when i see you smile a warmth spreads through me
i'll do all i can to make sure thats what you see
i'd walk across coals, through wind and in rain
i'll hold you so close and share in your pain
i would try and make all your dreams come true
be your lover and friend when you need me to
i'll make you feel passion that burns like a fire
and fullfill all your needs and your every desire
just one kiss from you takes my breath away
"i need you" is all u'll ever have to say
if you cry from those those feelings inside that you fear
i will tell you 'i love you"and wipe away your tears.
A contest entry
- don't tell me goodbye. by Sun-shiney.
300 points, ended June 30, 2008, 17 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Comments
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This is a very nice piece. Love the rhyme and beat that it carries. The only thing I don't care for is the one and only chat speak.."u'll" It takes away from the beauty of your work. In the second to the last line, you have two "those" in it. Other that that, great write.
Good luck in the contest.
Kelli
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