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Mirage

Missing image
Would you paint me on a smile
force me to be
a mere illusion
of what I was.

Tilt me
this way
and maybe a
resemblance
will spark;
reality is often
misleading.

Swaying softly
in trimmings
I can be
your Lady of circumstance;
sensing the urgency
of nightfall
leaning into your
desperate embrace.

Reminding myself that emotions,
don't own me.

Author notes

For Criss... try and remember that sometimes it's okay to let your heart rule your mind..

and no silly my muse didn't run away she's just busy with Summer...

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  • xXDarkChildXx
    July 8

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    Very nicely written. I really enjoyed this. It was just beautiful! The picture was really cool too. I think it fit the poem well. Keep on writing, until you can't no more!!

    xXDCXx

    ~Make Peace, Not War~

  • carole21
    July 1

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    nice

    nice original write .. liked "maybe a resemblance will spark" and "leaning into your desperate embrace" . . well done

  • Image and Visions silver member
    June 30

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    Nicely done

    You used a lot of imagry this and I found your style with it compelling and moving. Image and Visions


  • Rovingone gold member
    June 30

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    Anything that would put a smile on that dear face would be worth while. And, you certainly do explore feelings so well. Emotions don't own me either, (so I keep telling myself).


  • nilav
    June 30
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    beautiful...enjoyed it


  • paulcreates silver member
    June 30
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    For every thing there is a season. It's good to fly and it's also good to be grounded.
    Balance.

    Very well done although I would take the capital away from the last line and the previous period but keep the separation. Very nice metaphor and allusion.

    Paul


  • sidewinder silver member
    June 30

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    lately emotions have played their part in my life..and with this it's a reminder.
    keep penning on my friend!
    Bill


  • My Nemesis
    June 27

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    Maybe just the mood I am in right now - but I got a sense of loss from these words. It seems to be quite a sad poem to me.


  • Nicolette gold member
    June 26
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    This is lovely.....almost like tipping the heart over and letting it all run out.

    ~ Nicolette


  • Frozentearz gold member
    June 26

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    WEll glad to hear your muse did not run away, being busy with summer is good. so nice to see you penning and with such profound meaning,
    Blessings your way.
    Frozentearz

  • ardentMarch gold member
    June 26
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  • SeptemberFaith
    June 25

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    Cat, this is beautiful. I cant begin to tell you the volumes these words speak to me...

    thank you love,

    Criss

  • faderman1959
    June 25
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    Such a sad poem! The feeling of emptiness of self is palpable! A very strong poem on many levels!


  • Kelli Marie
    June 25

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    Oh wow...I think this is a pretty awesome piece of poetry. Very profound and full of great imagery. Great write.
    Kelli

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