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When i'm away

Can words fly like birds?

Can i borrow some wings, to ride the wind?

Can i burn this distance, mile by mile?

Can i find peace, in your endless letters?

 

When i'm on my knees, this dear is my prayer:

"Just give me one way to be with my love

my heart, feeling and soul they already rest there."

 

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  • myrataal silver member
    July 23, 2008

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    What a beautiful poem ...

    clear and profound; filled with yearning and simplicity of humble wish.



  • aboomer silver member
    July 11, 2008
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    short - but powerful! Full of great images and emotion.
    best wishes in your contest.


  • crazymomma
    June 25, 2008

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    Lovely imagery in this heartfelt poem. I really enjoyed reading this. Thanks for sharing


  • Kelli Marie
    June 25, 2008

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    These are some nice lyrics. Short, but nice. In the one line, "When i'm on my knees, this dear is my pray" I think pray should be prayer. Good luck in the contest.
    Kelli


  • teebs
    June 25, 2008

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    I like this - it's nice and short, very readable. A sweet heartfelt piece Good luck!


    • geron
      June 25, 2008
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      thanks
      and good luck on your first contest

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