Red lipstick on, ready to kiss
make up on, she doesn't shoot to miss.
The heat of the moment, creating sparks
these moments in life, sure to leave a mark.
A kiss on the lips she melts away
her morals gone, gone astray.
She dances and dances until the dawn
the strobe lights hitting, bright lights neon.
The boys she with all different and new
she gives them each a peek,sort of a preview.
Her body moves without control
her eye make up on, black as charcoal.
She cant keep dancing, and wearing tight skirts
but the boys are not healing the pain that hurts.
She knows time running out, running out fast
so she makes each second count, creating a blast.
Author notes
not about anyone in paticular haha
A contest entry
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450 points, ended June 26, 2008, 36 entries
Gold trophy winner
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do i have the rhyming thing down
Comments
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filled with vivid imagery although the background and text color are reaking havoc with my eyes and I feel dizzy. thank you for entering
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HAHA, red lip stick and black eyes, sounds like the girl that becomes the one starring in "Beauty", great work and congrats on the awards.
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Hah, yeah, I think we've all seen a version of 'that girl' somewhere. I respect her though, since she's smart enough to make the most of her life, living it up since you really don't know how long life will go. Love the poem, captured that essence of 'that' girl perfectly! thanks for entering!
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This poem sounds like it's full of a certain type of pain. The pain of the "fast girl"
the "party girl"a pain that most disregard.
I respect and enjoyed this write.
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That Girl
Title reminds me of the series years ago called, "That Girl". However, the content beyond Title totally does not as That Girl was a Miss Goody Two Shoes. This is a bit (A LOT) wilder than actress in "That Girl" series Marlo Thomas.
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"the boys she with all different and new" maybe she's with, not just she, sorry you know I love grammer. Yes your rhyming was great and this sounded like homecoming.. Haha. Good luck.
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I would have thought this had to be personal about someone you knew because it is so well written. I enjoyed the story. Great imagery
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Amazing..
Wow this poem is good. I could picture every moment as i read. It could be a bit longer but its very good small. This was very well written. My favorite part is when you said "the boys she with all different and new
she gives them each a peek, a preview" That was worded so great. Well thanks for entering my contest. I wish you the best of luck.
..<3..
shelly
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