I breathe differently than you
How do I know this to be true?
Because when I awaken in the night
I don't hear your sleepy sighs
I walk differently than you
How do I know this to be true?
Because when we needed you here
You walked away in fear
I talk differently than you
How do I know this to be true?
I speak of love and light
When I hear you speak, its full of spite
I stand differently than you
How do I know this to be true?
I am hear by day or night
But, you have given up the fight
I breathe differently than you....
Author notes
Option 2: I breathe differently than you.
I loved the prompt. It was very inspiring.
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A starting structure
You have a chorus of review that spins out illustrating parts of the connotation around "I breathe differently than you." The first set made me obviously imagine, the other individual possibly can't carry their stress so much they can't loosen up enough to doze. And, your third predicament states the proof, rather than just make-up, you can point to yourself silently saying, 'I don't do that.' I can hear you trying to encourage them to calm down...
"I speak of love and light" has a pleasantness that could be a brilliant try if it is a borderline for everyone.
LOL, "I am hear by day or night But, you have given up the fight" really perked me as for a pun [hopefully, you meant that misspelling of 'here.'] When you're in the go and ready for any calls for you to LISTEN and come in reasonable times that could be used, you still have the energy, maybe by motivation.
Thanks for entering your series observation,
Daisy
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