“I think a poet is anybody who wouldn't call himself a poet.” - Bob Dylan
‘Speaking of which…’ were the
beginning markings of paper-lined
phrases phased by mere moments
while the bus lazily smoked down
the road- slowly disappearing out
sight
Departures of inked casualness,
avenues within boulevard streaked
coerced madness fluttered about
waving the hand of an unknown
‘prostitute’
Attributes lingering still, thoughts
crafted themselves in third person
verbiage—transmitting a verse they
never heard before…
Deafening mute, perhaps?
And scribblings called art, preceded
the legacies of legend- a prodigy locked
on the other side of misshapen wooden
doorways~
(You see, this is what they referred as
contemporary modernization in the
world of paraphrasing poetics and poetry)
Vulgarity warranted, new wordings of
slang parenthesized the older, still-plausible
originals as linguistics branched out
more and more…
…Just as the bus lazily smoked up
the road- slowly reappearing in
sight
In a list
A contest entry
- Bob Dylan Quote Inspiration by Naridill.
650 points, ended July 9, 2008, 12 entries
Gold trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - AP's Best Prewrites by lowercase prelude.
800 points, ended July 22, 2008, 75 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - In Desperate Need of Inspiration by JustFallingApart.
300 points, ended August 25, 2008, 28 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me what you think
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nice write
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awesome word usage. this was a wonderful piece of literature
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Wow ... No wonder this got gold, it definitely deserved it. I felt this to have a really smooth flow - almost like talking but not as wordy or as aw. Elegant and close to perfection.
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Tough quote to really give more too but I felt the reflection of quote and the style you gave here really lent something brilliant and well written. Your imagery is spot on and I admire the uses of devices to match the wordings.
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again i am in love with your words, there was a slight kind of humor in it to me, maybe that is just me, keep it flowing and good luck in the contest
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First stanza, the very end reads
slowly disappearing out sight.
I think there's supposed to be an of in there.
Other than that small oddness, this was really good. I love the part about the deafening mute, perhaps? Simply due to the slight contradiction.
The quote at the top was also good. Your form, imagery, word choice. All work well.
Great job -Les -
A very nicely done piece. You did well with the quote and took it into the abstract. Pen on ...
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Great take on prompt
I agree with crazymomma, this
was a great take on the quote
you provided. Very creative
indeedy.
Keep penning
Del -
a very interesting take on the quote. I enjoyed the powerful words used here. This was very creative and enjoyable to read
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Insurmountable use of language here, it's lovely and flows so well, I can hear it in my mind. Furthermore you absolutely nailed the quotation here, it's great
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A thoughtful and intelligent write on the quote you chose. I like the idea of the bus disappearing and returning en route.
'Attributes lingering still, thoughts
crafted themselves in third person
verbiage—transmitting a verse they
never heard before'
I like it.
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