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touch

Touch

I allow myself go silent
This filament listens to the tender flow of music
that has no immediacy
but caresses as wind to a flower
this flower of consciousness

Sees children let their hands ebb and flow
to gentle sounds
Uncontaminated by demeaning tones of their past
They listen

Unbridled
Untouched
Touch

Author notes

a moment of surrender inspired this,
I consider this one my best
IsabellaC

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  • liveddog gold member
    May 9

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    Hi Isabella,
    I love the way you capture the purity and innocence of children in this poem. Yes they do listen to music in that "uncontaminated," "unbridled" and "untouched" way that children can do. Isn't it a pity how we can lose touch with that pure essence as we become adults? You wonderfully offer a way for us adults to get in touch with this original way of being in your 'author notes' which is to "surrender." I suppose it is only then we can know "Touch." What a great and wonderful understanding you have of being human and human beings!! A beautiful piece of creativity Isabella,
    Gratefully and warm wishes,
    Liveddog.


    • isabellacohen
      May 9
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      thank you

      thank you for your thoughtful and insightful commment,
      best wishes,
      Isabella


  • Garmond gold member
    April 3

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    Beautiful, and dare I say "touching" write. I can almost feel the sense of r e l e a s e.
    Nicely done.


  • Symphony
    January 2

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    Intriuging, after I read this I had to go back and read it again, adn once more, because I found it quite moving, in a way that I'm pretty sure you didn't intend-

    But it reminded me of a time when I worked with children with mental disabilities, mostly autistic children, and the lines,

    "Sees children let their hands ebb and flow
    to gentle sounds
    Uncontaminated by demeaning tones of their past
    They listen"

    It just brought their faces to the fore of my mind, and the way in which they, when listening to music, had dreamy looks in their glazed eyes, and literally did let their hands ebb and go wit hthe flow; this spoke to me so vividly - thank you for that, and also, thank you for entering


  • Age of Rain
    July 28, 2008

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    This is sweet and moving. I enjoyed this piece very much. Especially the word choice 'filament'. Best of luck!


    • isabellacohen
      July 29, 2008
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      thank you!

      Thank you very much,
      I appreciate your comments!,

      best wishes,
      isabella


  • Ronztrek
    June 27, 2008

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    Very Nice!

    I actually liked this piece a lot, flows well with softness, a moment of serenity well observed and expressed. Give your self a pat on the back for this one, for you have done very well  

    Best of luck in contest.  Pen on Poet.

    Ron


  • Unstoppable
    June 25, 2008

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    this poem is nice but it doesnt blow me away either. thank you for correcting your mistake so i can judge the other one.


    • isabellacohen
      June 30, 2008
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      cool

      I'm glad it did'nt blow you away as it was a moment of surrender,
      thanks for your comment
      Isabella


  • isabellacohen
    June 25, 2008
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    forgot to write in that i consider this my best

    Hi, new to site and i forgot to write in that I think this is my best,
    IsabellaC

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