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I Hear You

I have a friend who cannot hear, yet she does not complain,
how she can stay in constant cheer, my words cannot explain.

She can hear a flower bloom and smell it in the rain,
deafness is a silent tomb that words cannot explain.

The world of silence is profound; I cannot feel her pain,
a mind that cannot hear a sound, my words cannot explain.

Creative thought that sound destroys, I wish I could obtain
but how to live without the noise, my words cannot explain.

She speaks to me with pen in hand and poetry refrain,
how she makes me understand, my words cannot explain.

Some people scoff and even worse, I think they’re inhumane,
Amera knows about the curse, yet words cannot explain.

 

 

 

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Form:
Ghazal with internal rhyme.

For my AP sister, Lane.

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  • rhondasail
    September 4, 2008

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    YAY..this won a silver...I am so glad! I love ghazal, and I love Lane, and you put them together! I think I love you to Peace, Rhonda

  • Amarige
    July 11, 2008
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    This is an awesome piece of Ghazal..well done..best of luck in the contest
    Ruby


  • Auburn Sunrise gold member
    June 27, 2008

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    Whoa. I'm speechless.

    This is exquisite in so many ways. The subject, the rhyme, the flawless style, the diction... it's quite an accomplishment!

    Yet another great poem that will undoubtedly be published and remembered forever.

    This reminds me (though it is quite different in subject and style) of "The Road Not Taken" and "Nothing Gold Can Stay" by Frost - because all three speak universal truths - so simple in word choice and meaning, yet so complex in idea and so perfectly written.

    More proof of how great you are (as if anyone really needed more convincing!)


  • Sprite silver member
    June 27, 2008

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    Nicely put together in all aspects (rhyme, flow, form.) I love the second illustration. It seems the most apt. Without hearing, other senses compensate, even the intuitive ones. A lovely and hear felt poem. ~ Joyce


  • Rebekah-Ann silver member
    June 26, 2008

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    This is really lovely! My best friend for the passed 19years have both parents deaf. I will send this poem to her for she works with the hearing impaired daily and I'm sure she would also see the beauty in this.

    Congratulations on a very touching piece!

    Becks


  • HaleyMary
    June 26, 2008

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    This is a beautiful tribute for Lane. She is one of my favorite poets here on AP. I love how she writes her free verse. Sometimes what can first seem like a curse can turn out to be a gift. And, Lane is surely a very gifted poetess. Best of luck in the contest.


  • MJ Donnelly gold member
    June 25, 2008

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    This is very special indeed Amera and...

    "Such words are a poet's rousing cheer
    For the likes of a sweet woman
    Who is held so very dear."


  • penman gold member
    June 25, 2008

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    Excellent

    What skillful use of the form. And you added the aspect of rhyme, which worked so well. Best of luck in the contest.


  • Pisces Pieces
    June 25, 2008

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    This is a beautiful poem that enlightens us on a very worthy subject.

    A wonderful recognition of a friend/sister that so clearly expresses your caring.

    We take so much for granted...I work with children with disabilities and they are extraordinary.

  • rhondasail
    June 25, 2008
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    I love that you have kept the traditional Persian form, and yet made it so contemporary a poem. And the subject you chose, I immediately recognized Lane and could hardly wait to read to the end. This speaks of your own compassion and admiration and great loving heart as much as it does of that beautiful lady. Best of luck in the contest...sure to be a winner. Peace, Rhonda *(Oh, an excellent title as well, though ghazal doesn't ususally have a title.)

  • Have left the site
    June 25, 2008

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    This is a very pretty poem for your friend. Ghazel is not an easy form to do. This is a pretty good one.
    -Wil


  • PerVirtuous
    June 25, 2008

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    Beautiful and a wonderful tribute. You always seem to know how to make people's day. This should do wonderfully in the contest.


  • Dalaney gold member
    June 25, 2008

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    oh, thank you so much for this, Amera. It's been a rough day so far and you've just made me feel very good inside. The gift of your friendship means more to me than I will ever be able to express....Love, Lane


  • Rovingone gold member
    June 25, 2008

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    Wonderful, as always, Amera. You certainly are the absolute ruler of rhythm and rhyme no matter what sort it is. I have had several deaf friends in my life. The odd thing is, when they had the opputunity to gain hearing, either by amplification or with treatment and surgery, they turned it down. I suppose there must be a reason.


  • cricketjeff gold member
    June 25, 2008

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    Ghazals do not always appeal to me, this perfectly rhymed, internally and end line, and beautifully metered example is certainly one that does.
    That it is also a tribute to a mutual friend helps too, great poem, great work.


  • Mairi bheag gold member
    June 25, 2008
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    Damn!


  • echo-ink
    June 25, 2008

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    Awesome as always, Amera

    This was so heart touching, it never ceases to amaze me how you can use all the rules of difficult poetry and still, it comes out soooo amazingly beautiful. YEAY for Amera!!!


  • StarEyes
    June 25, 2008

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    Sis,

    What a beautiful read this one is! I love the way you set this one up!

    I was over visiting my son and his family the other day, and saw that they are teaching my grandson some sign language, and was just amazed! I had taught my boys some as they were growing up, and didn't think they remembered any of it, so this read kinda brought that to mind. I am soooo proud of them for doing that. I know my grandson will be able to communicate in many ways in this world!

    Best of luck in this contest!

    and love

    Nyetta

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