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not quite Juliet

 

 

 

 

It was a hard fall into Autumn;

into you & sea-green eyes that stared

into the soul of me.

 

We were like lovers who had never

loved before. You a modern day Romeo

& I not quite Juliet.

 

I remember we walked softly, hand

in hand, on hard of earth. Leaves gently

crunching beneath the weight of us.

 

Today I walk alone.

 

The leaves have abandoned

the realm of love; left

to wither in the breeze.

 

That same south wind that claimed

the keeping of hearts.

 

 

 

 

 

Author notes


Faithbound...Trina



xiii.
“it's hard to tell what time
leaves will abandon lovers
& how wind nonchalantly steals
subtle trust”

Prompt for Top Secret Group. First contest. Prompt given by Tangled Angled; my pizzaburger buddy.

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  • CatQueen248
    August 31
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    A beautiful poem. Short, but sweet, and gets your message across well. Good Luck in the contest.


  • Griswold silver member
    August 16

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    Well done, short yet full of meaning and emotion. A nice write. I wish you the best of luck in this contest...Scott


  • Tangled Angle
    July 25
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  • lively banter
    July 13
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    very pretty

  • Cerbie20
    July 3

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    i love the imagery in this poem... and i could really hear the crackle of the leaves... this is really good.

    We were like lovers who had never
    loved before. You a modern day Romeo
    & I not quite Juliet.

    very true with a lot of people....

    Today I walk alone.

    The leaves have abandoned
    the realm of love; left
    to wither in the breeze.


    alo very true with a lot of people, this ending. very good job!


  • delightfulmess gold member
    July 2

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    OUTSTANDING!!!!
    This is a great take on the chosen prompt.
    Very elegant


    Delila


  • Swan song gold member
    June 26
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    Oh my! very well done The imagery here was very good. and you broke my heart! loved it!


  • PageTurner
    June 25

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    Sighhh!



    "Your Beautiful Breeze,
    Blew Me Away, Scribe.

    ~ Nicky♥

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