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[ Filled with confused depressed ]

Filled with confused depressed
emotion to dim darkness seems
to be my only devotion

My soul seems to always cry, no
matter what,  all I do is want to
curl up and close my eyes and hope
that i could lose the inside pain
and die

Death and pain are always around
I know many times my mind is far
from being sound

I feel just that close of feeling
apart, but as I do than it always
seems to depart

Two feet forward and three feet
back, seems to be my sad life's
habitat

 

Just always that close,  but never

can reach,   as I try i fall and my

soul feels as if it could always pass

away and die

 

Why was I ever born,  if all I feel is

a loser inside pain,   in life  what

have i ever in truth ever gained

 

My inside soul cuts my spirit away

as day becomes night and I inside

slowly decays.

 

 

 

 

 







 

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  • aanika
    June 25, 2008
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    umm, the last stanza really doesn't make sense..
    My inside soul cuts my spirit away
    as day becomes night and I inside
    slowly decays.
    other than that, it is a very painful read.
    however, i would prefer less talk of death and more imagery.
    i want you to express your pain abstractly instead of throwing it in my face.