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Deepest Well

Love’s more than the sum total of our hearts,
imbuing us with great resiliency.
The well runs deep with courage it imparts,
establishing a new identity.

Imbuing us with great resiliency,
love alters us and forces us to grow.
Establishing a new identity,
in blessings from the tenderness we know.

Love alters us and forces us to grow,
we learn to see ourselves through lover’s eyes,
in blessings from the tenderness we know;
a new self from our ashes shall arise.

We learn to see ourselves through lover’s eyes,
unselfishly we welcome love’s demand.
A new self from our ashes shall arise,
allowing us the chance to understand.

Unselfishly we welcome love’s demand,
to face attrition of our fears unknown,
allowing us the chance to understand,
this gift means we shall never be alone.

To face attrition of our fears unknown,
the well runs deep with courage it imparts.
This gift means we shall never be alone,
love’s more than the sum total of our hearts.

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

Author notes

The pantoum consists of a series of quatrains rhyming ABAB in which the second and fourth lines
of a quatrain recur as the first and third lines in the succeeding quatrain; each quatrain introduces a
new second rhyme as BCBC, CDCD. The first line of the series recurs as the last line of the closing
quatrain, and third line of the poem recurs as the second line of the closing quatrain, rhyming ZAZA.

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  • Little Eagle Greeters member
    June 26, 2008

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    Thank you for your entry

    You really have personified love in this. This is everything love is and could be. Meant to be. Lovely flow and I like the plain background to let the words speak for themselves.

    The form was right on with well developed rhyme scheme which gave a good rhythm and flow. Nice structure.

    I encourage you to keep writing to read and comment.

    God Bless
    Tammy

  • haley27
    June 26, 2008
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    this is good

    I really liked this poem given with this form and imagery well penned. Haley27


  • echo-ink
    June 26, 2008

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    I don't pretend to know the whats and wherefores of the rules or form of this poem, but I can read beauty

    And this is true loveliness. beautifully written, My kind sir pervirtuous, here have three bunnies for the sum total of your heart. D x


  • StarEyes
    June 25, 2008

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    What a great job on this one! I love it! You captured the thoughts and feelings quite well in this one! This is one form I have not tried as of yet. But sure did enjoy reading it!

    Best of luck in this contest!

    and love my friend

    Nyetta


  • blondone
    June 25, 2008

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    Beauitful flow lovely imagery follows take true talent to write in form like this,

    True love is all these things combined ...


  • Amera gold member
    June 25, 2008

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    Yay! A love poem composed in a pantoum is pure magic. This poem flows like a river of dreams. The judge in this contest is a very good poet and knows form well so you are primed for a trophy with this. Bravo!

    Love,
    Amera♥


  • pantress silver member
    June 25, 2008
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    Good job on this one. I know this was harder than you made it look.

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