Water rushes, sweeps.
Tide enfolds as ground moves round.
Feet engulfed. Swallowed.
(c) anaisnais
A contest entry
- Haiku Contest ---for Visions through Haiku Members only. --- (Those who wish to be a member, apply through the application link inside) by Harrisham Minhas.
475 points, ended July 9, 2008, 12 entries
Honorable mention
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Comments
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Yup!
Sure can see this. I was always amazed as a child how when you were standing on the shore & the waves came in & covered your feet how they'd sink further, as you said, being engulfed! Glad you got HM for this!
I'm of the 'trad' squad in these forms & do think your presentation could be improved with this. 
IMHO...
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Hi, this is beautiful.. and yes u were right.. mine is also on the same lines
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Thank you for your Haiku:
Water rushes, sweeps.
Tide enfolds as ground moves round.
Feet engulfed. Swallowed.
It creates vivid images of fun in the beauty of nature.
Beautifully expressed.
Thanks again.
Harrisham Minhas
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Living by the ocean I can visualize all that you have shared in the few words, as one stands and watches the tide come in around ones feet...I love this!
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this poem is inspired by your environment , i think so ,good luck sis xx
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Superb!
Short but dramatic words here. Good one.
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Calls up such memories - playing along the shore, the power of water pulling, the resistance of your weight, the sinking and then the shrieking laughter at being momentarily trapped. Speaks too of future terrors.
Marlene
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Very nicely done, my best wishes.
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