Have you ever felt completely empty
Like you've always been alone
That no matter how much you cry
Your heart will never find a home
Have you ever searched for someone
As if, in solitary, you would die
Or gazed into your lover's soul
And realized that everything has been a lie
Have you ever held on tightly
So that you could pretend they were the one
As you scream, silently, inside yourself
Knowing that the loneliness has only begun
Have you ever prayed so fervently
That you think God must be tired of hearing from you
Yet, you still continue pleading
Because, you'll crumble unless you do
Have you ever just given up
No longer trying to find the way
Knowing that you'll never truly be loved
So you beg to, please, die today
A contest entry
- Break my heart and make me cry by God is my reality.
900 points, ended August 11, 2008, 79 entries
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I feel your pain
I feel your pain, so your point comes through, I did find some misspelled words that you might want to correct ...otherwise good write.
1st line; "Completely"
3rd stanza last line; "loneliness"
4th stanza first line; "fervently"
5th stanza 3rd line; "truly"
my favorite lines:
"Have you ever prayed so feverently
That you think God must be tired of hearing from you
Yet, you still continue pleading
Because, you'll crumble unless you do"
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Thank you! I was in a hurry so I forgot to run spell-check. I'll run it now.
~DAWN~
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This is so good. I love it completely. Definately gonna come out on top in my contest. It is so good. Right off the start, amazing rhyme scheme, LOVE THE EMOTION. Just perfect. Words can not express how good this is honestly, it's great. I fell in love with it from the first stanza.
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Have you ever prayed so feverently
That you think God must be tired of hearing from you
Yet, you still continue pleading
Because, you'll crumble unless you do
very very good poem -
so many feelings in this poem. great job
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