The arrow you shot through my heart,
Is what keeps..
My love for you wrecked me
This deep, dark depression you can't see
Its growing as time goes by
As I sit here and contuine
To lie to you about things
That I shouldn't lie about
Instead I was afraid
That I might lose you
My heart longs to see you once more
I know your gone forever
Tell my heart to stop beating
Tell my mind to stop thinking
Tell my eyes to stop crying
Throw a pebble in the ocean
Tell it to stop fading and
Tell it to stop sinking
Is like telling you
I need to stop falling in love with you
But I know it's my own fault
I should of never lied to you
Lying doesn't make anything better
It just makes it harder in the end
when you find the truth
Instead of hearing it from me
As I lay down
Feeling quite stupid the things
I did was wrong it seems like
I want to lose everything I have but
I don't I just wasn't thinking and
I know lying wasn't the right thing to do ...but
Now I know I made a mistake I'm not a perfect person or
A good one I'm not trust worthy
I ruin everything for everyone
I doubt myself ...
I Love You...
Goodbye as I close my eyes and
Watch everything I once had
Fade away slowly
How do I make you love me again
If the only thing
I feel now is
emptyness and gulit
How do I tell you I'm sorry
If the only thing
I see in myself is a lair
Now our memories will fade
All because of my stupid self
Lying to you ..why was I afraid
Im lost
Im alone
Im scared
And feel like no one cares
I feel like a stupid loser
I should walk away and
Never return cause
I'm not worth it
I don't deserve him
He deserve better than me
I'm just a stupid girl
With no life
Who doesn't know anything
About herself
Who hides from the truth
Who walks into darkness and
Talks with the shadows
Late at night
Before heading to bed and
Praying everything will be
Alright the next day
How can it be?
I trap myself
In my dream
Filling it with nightmares
To hurt myself for
Doing what I promise not to do
I tear everyday cause
I feel like am not a good person
I don't understand myself or
Anyone around me
I'm just alone
Everywhere I go..
So why bother loving me
I'll die sooner or later
Author notes
I wrote about this because
I lied to my boyfriend and I felt really bad about it
Now that I realize it was wrong he's gone
I was afraid to tell him the truth because
I thought he wouldn't like me anymore =[
So this is a bit emotional and sucidal
A contest entry
- Personaly experiences by Ntagatf.
500 points, ended August 31, 2008, 19 entries
Honorable mention
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
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Interesting peaice. I think we can all relate to this at some point. Lieing is never good, but sometimes it just happens. I was never able to find the right words to use when I got caught in something that I drowned in..You displayed this very well. Well done.
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Chorus.. melancholic... tears,, spreading..
we are going away, we are going away,..
i will miss you so much..
all fnished
keep writing
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Amazing poem. Like wow I dont know how to describe this. It was really good.
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Thanks for the comment glad you liked it
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I ruin everything for everyone I doubt myself ...I Love You...beautiful lines, love it. this is really well written, with a strong overall message thats conveyed brilliantly. i found it a little long but its still great
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Thank you
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I will be glad if you join my group and then participate in the contest started for the group
it was piece, i just felt myself deep inside it
it liked it alot
feeling like all happened with me and written by you
thank alot
t made me so heartly down
its my part
yes.
but i never spoke lie or cheated
but my one mistake brought me at nowhere
im just lost
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the poet of hearts and beautiful words
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I loved the poem.
But just because you lie sometimes doesn't make you a bad person, everyone makes mistakes no ones perfect.
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i love it
thats verry verry sad
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Aww so sad... especially if how you write this poem is how you feel... I hope only the best for you! Hoping that everything will turn out write!
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awww so sad! Its always good to say the truth tho, i did the same thing i lied to my ex a lonng time ago but he forgave me later on. It takes time. It was hard but i felt a lot better afterwards!
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wow i dont know what to say this is a great piece of work it takes my breath away nice job....
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Thanks ^^
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This poem is amazing. I love it. It's not your fault that you didn't tell your boyfriend the truth. You're not alone either even though you feel like it. My favorite lines were these:
"Who hides from the truth
Who walks into darkness and
Talks with the shadows
Late at night
Before heading to bed and
Praying everything will be
Alright the next day"
That's just amazing. You obviously have a gift. I feel like this too sometimes, but I try to think more positively and don't always succeed.
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"If the only thing
I see in myself is a lair"
lair is spelt liar. And beautifully broken write im sorry it was like this. -
AMAZING
my friend is going through all that right now that was amazing i loved it -
wow
This is amazing, full of emotion, sadness, regret, great write, heart felt, good job
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wow very deep i feel pain with every work i read. very very deep i love it great work and keep it up.
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wow this is so sad umm..... i am kinda speechless and all i can she is im here for you if you ever wanna talk
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Congratulations on placing with a Honorable Menmtion sis and well we all make regrettable mistakes and think of it this way as well: we tell lies to cover the truth the more lies that cover up the truth the more we'll be asking for trouble alter. I can understand the feasr and this write is clear and really well penned too though its very heart brteakin and sad. any ways good work as always sis indeed hang ikn there and never give up. Me
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Awe, sissy we all make mistakes this is a very heart breaking poem it makes me really sad that you feel this way. I would be lost if I didn't have you in my life. You are not a mistake I love you so much. You are my world :]
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You should tell him, if your this sorry and you love him this much you should.
If he throws it in your face, then you'll know how he stands just try=].
I don't see how he shouldn't your a great person, just tell him.
This is an amazing, touching, and sad poem. It seems like yet another of your poems have been written for my life(besides the lieing part...sorry)
your a great poet and person=]
keep your chin up!
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The 3rd stanza makes me picture a heart as a sinking pebble, too heavy with pain to escape its own demise. I liked the poem a lot, but I didn't enjoy it..knowing how you felt.
It's introspective and filled with genuine thoughts - it was good you were able to express them. Generally it has a nice flow, and the emotion sweeps us along with you all the way.
We learn from our mistakes...but the hardest part is imagining what could have been. Well...it's nothing compared to what will be if you are strong and forever follow your heart.
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This write conveyed a large amount of emotion that just kind of pierces the heart and bubbles the emotion of that situation to your heart.
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i loved it it was amazing i especially liked this bit
Im lost
Im alone
Im scared
And feel like no one cares
its so powerful
amazing write and enjoyable
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WOW intense poem dear really made me cry I feel for you
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Great poem Maria.....this is the first one I read of yours on here its very emotional and very well written...
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Omg!!!! maria! this poem is so awesome!!!
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I love how abstract this yet how it gets the point across. Lying has its own different areas one of the the black whole kind that swallows you and stabs into your conciounse.
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Amazeing write keep up the awesome work. i wish you the best of luck in my contest and thank you for entering. sorry it took so long for me to comment on this it got lost in the shuffle. I really liked the lines"
"Filling it with nightmares
To hurt myself for
Doing what I promise not to do
I tear everyday cause
I feel like am not a good person
I don't understand myself or
Anyone around me"
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Tell my heart to stop beating
Tell my mind to stop thinking
Tell my eyes to stop crying
Throw a pebble in the ocean
Tell it to stop fading and
Tell it to stop sinking
Is like telling you
I need to stop falling in love with you
one of the bets paragraphs iv ever read amazing work
great job
first finalist for today :]
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Wow
Very relatable, i just wrote about one of my break up's and i lied to my bf than broke up with him because i believe he deserves better, i cheated on him with an ex and he has yet to find out. But i really like this because like i said very relatable.
You are not giving yourself enough credit, everyone fucks up in life... its a part of growing up and finding yourself. And i just recently discovered that no matter what you've done you always need someones love and understanding from either friends family or spouse. You'll be okay even if things dont work out. However i'm very sorry that you feel this way and i wish you the best of luck in my contest. Keep up the good work! -
wow
This is so dynamicly expressive!!!The third stanza has got to be my favourit,breathtaking write!!
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yes! and we all do, die sooner or later! I loved reading this very much and you are a finalist in the contest!!! take care always! ~pithyAplomB.
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very deep
i love how descriptive you are about the fact of how hard it is to stop loving someone
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The flow was a bit choppy a few changes could be made to fix it but its a good read shows some real passion..your on your way
btw thanks for the comment on fuck it
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lol forgot to applaud , so so tired
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Wow I really loved this poem, it's so sad but so well written the whole thing is great I have really felt like this at times and the ending
I'm just alone
Everywhere I go..
So why bother loving me
I'll die sooner or later
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Wow this is kinda sad. Otherwise very well written and i like it alot. Thanks for entering my contest i wish you the best of luck..
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Hi, I'm sorry but in my contest rules it said poems have to be between 12-42 lines, so i will have to remove this pome sorry. Fell free to add a diffrent one to my contest...
It's a good write though.
Thanks for entering
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this is an amazing poem...so heartfelt. you just pour everything out. i felt exactly the same way a couple of weeks ago
But I know it's my own fault
I should of never lied to you
Lying doesn't make anything better
It just makes it harder in the end
When you find out the truth from someone else
Instead of hearing it from me
seems like you just pulled my life from me and threw it here. its really good...i can feel the emotion, the anger at yourself just bouncing off the page. you should check out some of mine...a bunch of them have similar topics to this
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Brilliance
There are so many friggin good lines in this, I can't even paste any. I am going through this in my life right now with my love and it sucks...sucks big time. I love this. This is a 10/10. That's all I can say. Each line of this poem makes my heart turn and my heart cry; You can't get more emotional then that. Thank you for writing something so touching...so real. Keep writing and never EVER stop. I'm a fan forever.
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