Bring death to everything around her
Touch this rose and feel life's pain
You'll bask in the glory of Lord Death's embrace
When everyone you know has gone insane
She'll cry in the midnight's castle
Hidden under the tempest's dawn
With blood red lips of meaningless matter-
A funeral which God, himself, had sought.
A silhouette of dark red satin
Shattered ever in the rose's blood
With midnight's cries to covered her passing
And the coming of the rays of the black sun
Cover e're your eyes from the shadowed ways
'Lest your fate meet hers the same
As the rose will leap unto its next victim
To guide their life unto the path of shame
Bring death to everything around them
Touch my rose and feel my pain
You'll bask in the glory of Lord Death's embrace
When you realise I have gone insane.
Author notes
~WinterStormrose
A contest entry
- wake me up and let me know you're alive by Weetzie bat.
850 points, ended July 25, 2008, 38 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - It's All About the Rhyme by BlackSwan.
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Comments
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The Rose
and a black death that it brings. Interesting write. apparently many thornes on this Rose. dark and delicious poet.
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A silhouette of dark red satin
Shattered ever in the rose's blood
Fantastic words and imagery! Congrats on a great write, and good luck.
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This poem really carried my interest, however this piece doesn't seem to keep a consistent rhyme scheme, as I could not find rhyme in these two stanzas:
She'll cry in the midnight's castle
Hidden under the tempest's dawn
With blood red lips of meaningless matter-
A funeral which God, himself, had sought.
A silhouette of dark red satin
Shattered ever in the rose's blood
With midnight's cries to covered her passing
And the coming of the rays of the black sun.
This is a rhyming contest.
Good write though honestly
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i enjoyed your take on death. the imagery was amazing.
She'll cry in the midnight's castle
Hidden under the tempest's dawn
you have a sort of slant rhyme throughout your poem and lets just say that i appreciate it more than actuall rhyme.
^^
thank you for entering my contest
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