My dearest Teddy Bear
why do you cry?
What happened to your arms?!
Why are they scarred?
Please tell me.
I cry because no one understands me and
sometimes I feel as if no one loves me.
My arms are scarred because the pain
was to much, I needed an escape.
My dearest Teddy Bear
dose cutting hurt?
How can I help you?
Promise me you’ll stop,
I love you.
Yea cutting hurts but the physical pain
makes me not think about the rest.
You can help me by trusting me, listening
to what I say cause it is important.
I promise ill stop. I believe you can help me,
and I know my friends are always here for me.
But please be patient, cuttings my addiction.
I love you so much Teddy Bear <3
Author notes
This is a poem I wrote for my friend. One of my best friends is a ex-cutter and I love her alot and I wanna help her any way I possibly can. This poem is very close to my heart so I wanted to see what my friends a AP thought of it, so tell me what you guys think. Lovers ya!
A contest entry
- The ribbon on my wrist says do not open before christmas. by Jaffa-.
500 points, ended December 25, 2008, 23 entries
Honorable mention
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Please tell me what you think
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I like how you wrote this. It's more of a conversation that you are writting down. I like how you gave the reader hope. There are a few grammar and spelling mistakes. In the forth stanza second line I think you meant does not dose. I'm very glad that you could be there for your friend like that, it's hard for a self harmer to reach out for help and for them to stop. She is right, it's an addiction. Good job and good luck in the contest.
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this is vry amazing. I wish I had somebody I couldsay I fully trusted. Wouldnt that be great if you could find a few great people and that would be all you really needed? [: I hope all is well
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I like this poem a lot. I like the form of it and how you wnet back and forth between the bear and your questions. Very cool form.
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Don't mean to sound penickity, but you have misspelled "scarred". It has two 'r's.
This is a very different take on self-harm- well done.
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Amazing is all i can really say.
Exactly what i was looking for.
Your a finalist.
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Amazing. It helps knwoing you have somone to talk to about things. I had this problem for about 4 years, Been clean for 3 months because finally, i have somone to talk to. [: your a good friend. Always take time to listen to somones problems, you may be saving their life.
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thanks for commenting on my poems and my page... one piece of advice, I am a stickler for typos... and Scarred is with 2 R's not one. You might want to fix that in this poem. I am happy your friend is an ex-cutter and that you care enough about him/her to write to her. I have had a few friends like yours, but one is no longer with us... she gave up - I feel like I failed her, but it was a long time ago... all I can do now is move forward, and pray for those with afflictions I cannot help.
lynn
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Bangin'! :)
Hmm. I like it. I'm an ex-ex-(um, ex?)cutter. I have cut in awhile, so yeah I really like in the poem how you used a teddy bear to represent your friend, I don't know why, but I did
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hey...thats pretty cool...
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this is so sweet! great write gurl!!
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Very good and close to the heart. You might want to just fix a few tiny errors. When you wrote scared I think you meant scarred and does instead of dose. I'm a little nitpicky when it comes to details, sorry.
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wow
that made me cry it made me think about the way my friends were when they found out i was cutting and omg it was so real i try not to think about that but it was just so real the flash back was so horribl and the teddy bere told you the same thing i told them it gives me some thing else to think about 4 a wile -
Well i think this is Great. So meaningful.
It made me think alot. Its a great write though. Well done. xx
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REDBEST,;ZANNAH; HANNAH
This was beautiful and from the heart, which is what real poetry is suppose to be about. love you and love your teddy bear poem. MUM xoxox
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omg hannah i like this alot and nice way to make me think.....luverz u
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This is really sweet. Great work.
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