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Candy Floss

When the lord passed out the rhythm and blues
He had you most in mind
And covered you in glory be
To see what all might find
And I know you like to be the boss
And step out of your clothes
I love to taste your candy floss
Lordy, make me one of those

Candy floss
Oh my, candy floss right down to your toes
Candy floss me through the night
Expose me to all of those

You must be Miss Universe
With your bedroom eyes and smile
So grab the Pentax and stay right here
We can dalliance for a while
We should throw a party mix
And just wear our birthday clothes
So cover me in chocolate paint
Right down to my toes

Candy floss
Oh my, candy floss right down to your toes
Candy floss me through the night
Expose me to all of those

You know you have the nicest set
Of porcelain that I know
I'd love to fill them with liquid love
And bathe in the afterglow
And when you wear your garter belt
You net me like a fish
So candy floss me all night long
Is my dearest wish



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  • EbonyQueen48
    July 11

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    this is a brillant write, very well written and the flow is off the hook, I loved the title. it shows alot of creative thought went into this poem, once again great write and good luc


  • Still Standing gold member
    June 23

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    Hot song!

    What I like about this two things 1. The orginality 2. The sub tle erotic tone it takes on. I mean its there but its very subtle which is like a tease and wanting us to be for more candy floss! Good luck


  • Juggalette Sammy
    June 2

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    Nicely done. Cute and Sensual in all the right places. I love how you used Candy Floss as a sexual, but yet sweet term.

    Great job and thank you for entering!


  • MYsecondchance
    March 14

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    I liked this, thank for entering.
    I don't understand the point of the coffee beans as the background.


  • xXCadyBabbiXx
    December 18, 2008
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    This is really awesome, and truly sexy.
    I like it a lot.
    Thank you for entering.

  • piccola silver member
    August 12, 2008

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    I've read this before and really liked it then. It is sensuous and fun to read. The rhyme and flow are great. Thank you very much for the entry.


  • Funluvingrl16
    August 2, 2008

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    1. center align.
    2. i cant really read what you are writing.

    im trying not to be mean even though it sounds like it.


  • IrishGypsyRose silver member
    July 17, 2008

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    Sexy

    I love this piece....The imagery is amazing, candy floss, now that is a term I've never heard but can picture it in so many forms.Tongue out  I like the meter and the flow and the metaphors....My favorite line is "So cover me in chocolate paint and we'll explore it I suppose"  Wonderful. Great write and a great read.  All in all fantastic.  Best of wishes in my contest. ~mandie~


  • Blooming Poet
    July 5, 2008
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    hmm very sexy

  • autumndreamr
    July 1, 2008

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    I love the wonderful beginning,"When the lord passed out the rhythm and blues
    He had you most in mind
    And covered you in glory be". Although the rest of the poem is good, I'd have loved to see you follow through with the feel of those lines, perhaps in a southern heat, sensuality. : )

  • piccola silver member
    June 26, 2008
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    Love the rhyme and can hear it as a song. This is great and thanks for the entry. Now I have to go ask my grandaughter what floss is lmao.

  • Hovels 2
    June 25, 2008

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    I have to hand it to you, you make me giggle when you talk about that. Normally, when people talk about someething like this, I'm all uncomfortable and quiet. You have a funny, lovely, creative way of putting it.


  • Ms Sexy silver member
    June 24, 2008
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    "Candy Floss" cute wit a twist good luck

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