Wisping tendrils of
Placid rainbows and
memories of a bridal gown
prince charming laughing
so softly, tickles her senses
forgetting how to frown
a head on collision was not
what was expected on what was supposed
to be a day of celebration
instead of down the isle
hospitals became the alter
white, lacy gown stained in accusation
high Charlotte voices
cried out in panic
how to save her, headache override
groom watching numb to him
the sleeping image of his
beautifully, quiet, little bride
coma was all there was to say
as snow fell limp outside the
foggy window of a hospital room
snow became rain and then rain became
another year, passing by and soon
lonesome became of the groom
quiet now was the hospital room of the
bride who would wear her gown
to no where she should be
no more whispered cries or
weeping groom's hiding
now there was no one left to see
blue.
eyes..
open...
colorless to find herself just a
few years older, with a paper bag dress
clasped snug to her aged form
there was no groom to comfort
no friends to hug awake and her
bridal gown stray hanging, old, dusty, and torn
if let free was what she was
waking to, it would have been
a surprise to even fathom so
for what she'd left behind was just
a figment of ashes, a freak accident
is all the neighbors seemed to know
with nothing on her back but a
broken heart and a bridal gown
that had once been so white, now a crusty, stingy brown
with a groom married to his 'true' love
and dream house gone in candle smoke
her Fairy-tales simply fell to go and lay face down
memoirs of wedding bells rest in
the ashes of the dusty window sill
that serves as a grave for broken hearts to play
but there is nothing left for
placid Fairy-tales of a woman who slept in nightmares
through the heart she gave away...
Author notes
Picture Prompt:
http://zemotion.deviantart.com/art/Forgotten-Fairytales-58397032
♥
If you had lay in a coma, for several years, to wake and find you had nothing left to come back to. What would you do?
It has a strange flow to it...one that is best read allowed if you get the rhythm...hmm...could be bad.
A contest entry
- ♥.* -Prompt- *.♥ yey please enterr! by With Broken Wings.
525 points, ended October 8, 2008, 18 entries
Silver trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Comment if you wish.
Comments
1 - 12 of 12
-
Very good take on your picture, it reminds me a lot of Stephen King's The Dead Zone. Thank you for entering the contest, good luck.
♥
whisper
-
Impresive
I liked it. The rhythm was a bit choppy but the story you weave goes with the picture. I like how you had her eyes open with each word it's own spot. I really liked this.
-
-
I made it choppy, because when I was writing, I wasn't thinking about it being a piece that is hard to catch onto unless you read it aloud and known the meter. XD haha
-
-
WOW
Awesome penning with to die for imagery! Brilliant job you did on this one! I adore it!!!!!!
POETDONTKNOWIT
WRITING IT HER OWN WAY
-
Bravo! I really like the poetic story that you told. Very well penned
Peace and Love
-
Wow this is deep and very emotional!!! I can really feel the emotion behind this what a sad write!! Makes me want to cry!! You did a excellent job portraying this piece!! Your word choice is fantastic and your words and stanzas are amzing!!! You did a fantabulous job!! LOVE IT!!
-
I think I've seen a couple of movies with the same theme as the one you portray in this poem. Waking up after comma only to find out that you're alone. Must be hard, and impossible to truly relate to. Anyway, your poem is very well written and portrays a lot of great emotions. Good job!
-
tears fall where in I see this... and tears of my own still haunts today as i remember my own bride to be disappeared in to the river as the car went over the bridge> yes this did happen to me when i was 19 yrs old
Bill
-
your words bring much emotion and imagery. good job...thank you for entering and good luck.
-
at the beginning i was a little lost but as i read on i began to feel what you're talking about.
this is gorgeous...and beautifully written. thanks bunches for entering my contest
♥Toxic -
This was a wodnerful take on the prompt!!! You did such a good job!! the imagery was just so vivid! And the emotion was really hreatfelt and touching though this was a sad write you did a wonderful job.. Best of luck..
Angel
-
Hey!! thanks for enteringg..
Here are your prompt choices:
-"You look at me with such sad eyes
I sense your pain, I know why you cry
The memories that fill you will never die"
-"Ask me what's wrong... I wont even know"
-"Take my hand... tonight"
Your picture choices are:
-http://zemotion.deviantart.com/art/Forgotten-Fairytales-58397032
-http://Infery.deviantart.com/art/Lost-35546557
-http://concreteangel809.deviantart.com/art/torn-between-love-89855614
yeaah.. so you can take it anywhere you'd likee.. and if you dont like any of the choices, or have a hard timee or something, just tell me, and I will see what i can do
Good luck!
Adding your comment:
1 - 12 of 12
