As lightning struck against the moving clouds
Thunder roar in returned blocking out my voice in the darkness
Standing here soak with shivering chills
I scream into the distance
Rain is pouring down hard as if crying out for my pain
I welcome it wanted it to wash my tears away
As it flows down to the stream below
It been a long time since I can remembered
I've always watch you on the side line
The Feeling that I felt not even love can describe
I let myself go completely
Sometimes I wonder of my sanity
Running blindly into my destruction
That I've purposely placed there in the beginning
Walking down this drenching path
Wandering aimlessly into the night
I'm not foolish just another victim at love's mercy
You've shun me away to marry a woman that you don't love
I know I'm nothing not even your second best
You've proving that when I heard that wedding bells today
Putting that fake smile on you walk out with your new bride
Rain is beating down on me harder
Reaching to the lake I saw my reflection
That lifeless eyes looking back at me
That stranger I can't recognize
It tells me to 'give up it's over'
I take that in mind as I slowly walk further into that alluring depth
Till it reaches over my head there I sink
With my last breath I smile
...I'm not afraid anymore...
As death consuming me into the deep
A contest entry
- Break My Heart by Mistress Masquerade.
600 points, ended July 11, 2008, 47 entries
Honorable mention
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Comments
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wow is all i can honestly say im in complete awww i love it your such a great poet keep it up!!! ♥ i can totally relate to the whole seeing hte one you love with someone else and it sucks and hurts a lot thank you for writting this
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thank you I really apreciated it
and yes it sucks..life happens to be like that all the time..it just takes a long time for me to get used to it...again thank you
Lieu
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I can feel the picture, I don't even need to see what this was orignally written about. For this is my contest not takemypainaway's. I love the heart breaking emotion and I can understand seeing your love with someone else, though not in as extreme case as a wedding. Thank you for entering and best of luck.
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thank you for your kind words..and yeah I fall for him but never was he care..but it doesn't matter to me that he shun me I still loves him..I'm not foolish but I can't back away..till today I still don't understands why he married her for I know he don't love her...trying to moved on though seeing him once in awhile still hurts..again thank you and I hope you enjoy judging the contest...
LIeu
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very true to the picture!!!
"With my last breath I smile
...I'm not afraid anymore...
As death consuming me into the depth"
the ending was amazing you have such great expression!!
thank you for entering
**kat
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thank you for your kind words I'm glad you like this piece of mine..Hope you have fun in judging!
Lieu
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It's a good write.
Nice flow to it. Also nice wording. You expressed your self really well...
Thanks for entering.
Good luck
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Thank you for your wonderful commentand I hope you have fun judging the contest
Lieu
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Thank you for entering my contest. This poem was very interesting. I loved how well it flowed. Great write and good luck
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Thank you for your kind wordsI'm glad you like my piece..and hope you have fun judging the contest
Lieu
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option in your notes please
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oopps srry I got distracted..I'll put it on now again srry about that
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If you put that in a contest, Lieu, u are so going to win!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!! Good Luck, hon
CeCe
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lol...well thank you deary
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This is beautiful ! I absolutely lalaloved this piece :] You have such a captivating way with words, and such a talent at describing.
"Walking down this drenching path
Wandering aimlessly into the night
I'm not foolish just another victim at love's mercy"
Oooh, I must say I definitely loved those lines. They hold so much mystery. That's what I love about your poems;; there's always a little bit of mystery in them. It reminds me of Star Wars
:-P
"With my last breath I smile
...I'm not afraid anymore...
As death consuming me into the depth"
& whoa, now. There could not have been a better way to end this piece. Woot ! You sure have a wonderful talent ! This was excellent <3
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lol...you know you just popping out of nowhere when it's least expected
Thank you old wise one for your...gosh I'm running out of idea to say this...hummm...nice.no..kind..no...extraordinary..humm yeah that's it!!! Extraordinary Comment!!!
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Oooh, extraordinary is a big word ! especially for you !
I know
I'm like a squirrel;;
I'm very unexpected.
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HEY!! I'm still consider smart even with this pea size brain of mind...I just choose to not use it 99% of the time
Squirrel..huh..I'm usually think they're coward running away when they hear a movement *laugh*
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