Somewhere in a dark corridor,
filled with locks on dreams,
a young woman stood;
withholding the key she needed.
Unknowing as to which of
these locks she could open,
she began to try them all.
One by one by one;
many times each day.
Any spare moment she had
went to trying the locks.
On lock after lock,
she would use that same key.
Hoping one would open at last.
Her wish came true on one
rain-filled day.
The door flung open
and through it she sprang.
Into a world so strange.
Ground was not needed
to walk upon there.
This world was made of music.
Nothing but music;
it rang from the reaches.
"Music," it sang. "Music."
And music there was!
From the birds to the trees.
Each moment another note
was born from the air.
Vines curled in time,
to the bass rhythm of
the spinning revolutions.
Our young woman had found it;
her solace of dreaming.
Everything she'd been needing.
The melodies rang out;
pure and clean.
They welcomed her
with their open arms.
Thus forth,
music was her life.
For there she did stay.
Author notes
Poetic inspirations?-> http://steel-ivy.deviantart.com/art/corridor-of-locks-89533797
http://ethernity.deviantart.com/art/The-music-nature-71718320
Umm... Well this is pretty straightforward. Not really many hidden metaphors. Enjoy the story.
A contest entry
- A big big big big big CONTEST..pic inspired...you tell me what type of pic you want!! by MaMa-2-be-Cindy.
1800 points, ended July 7, 2008, 30 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Comment honestly please. But don't be rude. CONSTRUCTIVE CRISTISM is welcome. But don't bash me; I work hard.
Comments
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I enjoyed this whole read a lot..you have done so very well with the picture given
Thank you and good luck
Cindy
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WOW!!! I really like it! Having a world like that would be so cool!
Great job sis!
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That was beautiful. Seriously, I'm in awe. What a wonderful world that world be!
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Thanks.
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Alright, time for a true comment. ^.^
This was awesome. You went above and beyond the picture itself. You also took notice to the multiple keyholes, and used it to show effort and longing on behalf of the character. And then after that...you let your imagination loose, building a world out of music. The picture may have had a little to do with it, but nevertheless, I loved it. The last stanza there gave me a new way of thinking about saying that something "is your life;" Instead of just dealing with it all the time, you simply live in it.
Great job! Good luck in the contest!
--Flare
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Thank you. Eh, don't give my so much credit. I just read the picture description.
Thanks. I'm glad I did well. This was fun to write.
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Wow, this is looking good - and you got some awesome pictures, too! Lemme know when this is done.
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'Tis done. Not the greatest. But it's different I guess.
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I shall, which will be either later today or sometime tomorrow. I hope. Yeah, I did. I'm going to have fun with this one.
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here's your pic: http://ethernity.deviantart.com/art/The-music-nature-71718320
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here U go... http://steel-ivy.deviantart.com/art/corridor-of-locks-89533797
and lowercase prelude will probably post another for you aswell..your welcome to use both...of just one..post it with your entry or the link for the one/s used in your auhtor notes
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