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To Be Humble

This artistic nature means nothing
If I do not wash the dishes,
If I follow the dark path
That is protected by witches;
Where no man with mars west should go,
Only humbleness to know
The direction of my soul.

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Written January 2nd, 2004

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  • irishwillow
    February 9, 2008

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    I like it. It's hard to explain why, it just makes sense in a senseless sort of way and strikes a cord. Like I said, I like it, simple yet saying so much.


  • SandraMVeinot
    November 16, 2007

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    if you be, of;
    and for him,
    then;
    praise be to you;
    amen......

    thank you for the early Autumn morning read.....
    as always.....

    uniquely spoke from you.....


  • moocow96
    November 10, 2007

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    good

    I liked it, the last two lines are beautiful...
    I just had a little trouble with the way it's set up.
    The rhyming scheme, if it's there, is a little confusing...

    Overall though, it was a great read.
    Good job...

    <3,
    Aura

  • shirazi
    November 10, 2007

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    Great Poem

    This was very nice. You have brought out the beauty of humility in a thought provoking and enlightening way. I agree, this is very good in so few words. Being humble is the root of all good, just like Pride is the root of all things despicable. I'm glad to know there are people who value this treasure of humility. Nothing but good comes from it!


  • freespirit51
    November 6, 2007

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    You sure know how to write a complex poem with so few words. It was a very enjoyable read my fellow poet.


  • grannyeri gold member
    October 16, 2007
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    Some are too humble, others not humble enough. There has to be a mid way that is acepetable to most. Easy to read and understand what you write about humility in these few lines. Net rhythm rhyme anda flow.


  • Sinnastarr silver member
    September 10, 2007
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    I like this piece. It flowed very well. It also has a good ryhme scheme. All and all an enjoyable read.
    Keep up the good work.


  • Aussie Gypsy gold member
    September 8, 2007

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    It's nice to see someone in the world is a little humbled and glad for all of the gifts they have received, what a wonderful piece here

    Karen


  • Lonely
    May 29, 2004
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    The way you ended this poem is really nice.. I enjoyed reading it, and loved the shortness.. Thank you for reading my poem

    Lonely~


  • brad-the-bard
    January 3, 2004
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    Humility - a virtue that's not highly rated in this day and age.

  • Angel on Fire
    January 3, 2004
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    This was very interesting. It got me thinking. Good job I enjoyed this.
    *Steph

  • fallen-angels
    January 2, 2004
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    Hmm. Interesting. I wonder what brought that on. I like it. It seems to make a very good observation. And resolution about life. Tis cool.

  • John J. Ruppert
    January 2, 2004
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    This was pretty cool.

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