I stand alone in a room of my mind opening a door
not to go deeper in for deeper there is not
this door is to a wardrobe I hide from the world
yet what’s inside is shown to all
for in this wardrobe, behind this door
lies only the faces on the masks I ware
masks I wear all around to hide what lies inside
masks I wear around my house
to fool my mom and dad
masks I wear at school with friends
so they don’t worry or fret
masks I wear the malls
so I don’t draw attention and I can slide on by
but now I tern and take off the mask I wear to fool myself
and look into my reflection
and looking back at me was nothing,
no face, no soul
where have I gone
what have I become
Author notes
for the contest i entered this one is important to me because it actually has meaning and makes a statement i think needed to be made
-downed lover
A contest entry
- Rain, Eyes, and Pain Quickie by takemypainaway.
900 points, ended June 26, 2008, 12 entries
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This is an amazing poem and does have very good meanin although you did not put your option in your notes...
"yet what’s inside is shown to all
for in this wardrobe, behind this door
lies only the faces on the masks I ware
masks I wear all around to hide what lies inside"
this is amazing -
I liked the idea conveyed here. I would suggest that you correct spelling errors as that is something that will tend to take away from your otherwise well-written work. I would have given 3 applause had it not been for that. Errors that stood out were several instances of "ware" that should be spelled "wear", "tern" should be "turn" and "sole" should be spelled "soul".
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thanks
thank you for the help. i have made the changes you sudgested and if you see any more i would love for you to tell me
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this poem is more deep than the other and again you really put in all together when you display your work. The colors and images reflect the message of the poem. i would like for you to go back and edit the notes to reflect why its important to you and the other one why u think its your best.
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i added onto the auther notes as you asked thank you for looking at my work so promptly
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fist impression the idea of the poem you have put on the masks for so long you have lost your own idenity what started to work at the start is now took over your whole life the masks play the perfect get away and for so long that worked but like every thing else you have to face your demons now and your afraid you want be accepted for you its a cry for help and your poem speaks volums for a lot of people out there great poem
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this is very dark and a bit creepy, but in a dramatic way.
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