shivering in open sky
wings closed together
full throated call incessant
for its love dwelling in nest
looked intent but forlorn
her call not delivered
the sweet heart
it was in search
others flocked to its side
listening melancholy song
they caught the muse
except the bird inside
it is isolated
though many around her
heart holds the reins
nested bird hijacked
A contest entry
- Unrequited Love by yaong.
1100 points, ended July 5, 2008, 19 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me what you think
Comments
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hijacked?!
Bold choice of words Ven.
"others flocked to its side
listening melancholy song
they caught the muse
except the bird inside"
I love this portion most.
The full poem has
a degree of truth in it,
when applied to me.
Lovely Ven
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a beautiful poem on the promt of requented love many dont ever feel this within there lifes because they cannot look inbetween to capture the world around them wonderful poem my friend loved these line they paint mixed feelings beautifully
shivering in open sky wings closed together
full throated call incessant for its love dwelling in nest the sweet heart it was in search it is isolated though many around her heart holds the reins nested bird hijacked good luck in the contest x
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Have some applause.
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lovely
Beautiful, once again.
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