I am such a fool,
so eager was I to embrace my immortality.
That not once did I consider
how very long eternity can truly be.
With just one bloodied kiss,
she seduced me to the darkness.
I sacrificed my soul to her charms,
a willing lamb to the slaughter.
Sired in blood,
awoken from death in adulation.
Naked, shaking, confused.
Temples pounding,
searing birth pains,
raging hunger.
And so she laughed,
mindful of her own siring.
She beckoned me to her.
‘Come my love, feed with me.’
she whispered softly,
biting into my flesh.
I tensed in suppressed euphoria,
before finally succumbing
to guilty pleasures
and fading inhibitions.
I bit into her, drank deeply
and fucked her with a passion
I have never before known.
Such perfection,
such ravenous beauty,
such bloodlust…
And so the hunt began,
the scent on the wind,
the fear in their eyes,
the lust in our souls.
Oh the games we played,
Stalked, cornered, terrified.
The heartbeat of prey,
forfeiting life in it’s betrayal to my ears.
Sweet life blood seasoned with fear.
Oh how we fed…
We made bitter sweet love
in the falling ashes of Pompeii.
We kissed without abandon
as Rome burned and perished.
I held her in my arms
at the fall of Arcadia,
with a love so all consuming
and never ending.
We walked in eternity
with a passion transcending the ages.
For a millennia,
we slept in the shadows.
Unseen, unknown, forsaken.
Feeding in the velvet darkness
on the flesh of the lost and weary.
We watched as nations rose,
We fed as civilizations fell.
Growing ever bolder
in our twilight playground.
Gods among mortal men…
But alas, all must finally perish.
All must turn to dust
and try as they may
to find peace in eternal slumber.
I lost her… my beloved dark angel…
Impaled as she slept
by hunters of our kind.
She shrieked a curdling, fearful death cry,
and I awoke with a terror unsurpassed
since I was mortal.
I leapt into the air with great lustre,
ripping apart the nearest to me.
I bellowed my rage at them,
swatting arrows out of the air
with a focused agility unknown to me.
They scattered and fled into the night,
my rage unfed, my thoughts in flux.
I held her in my arms, weeping
as she looked into my eyes
one final time.
‘I shalt live again, my love… find me ’
she whispered softly
and crumbled to dust in my arms.
I shrieked my raging sorrow
into the darkness.
I ran into the night,
their scent still fresh in my nostrils.
My vengeance was unmatched
by any before me.
Such carnage, such cruelty, such gluttony.
I sired their children,
I raped their women,
I fed them to their heirs.
And so their village burned
from time and memory
in a wake of blood and fire.
None lived to recant my fury,
none lived to regret their transgressions.
Even the sired children perished
in the rays of the rising dawn.
Yet despite the justice
of my dark fury,
I found I was unable to draw satisfaction
or solace from my brutal vengeance.
Without her, I’m an empty, hollow shell,
heartbroken and alone,
without purpose or reason.
And so I slept,
untouched by eternity
as the decades came and centuries passed.
Awoken only by a mournful lullaby
that heralds to my soul
that she walks this Earth once more.
Yearning, stirring, awakened.
I rise with purpose,
shaking off the murky shackles
of deepest slumber.
Ravenous, I feed and brave this new world,
searching, craving, tasting her very essence
on the edge of darkest perception.
Fear thee not my love, fore soon I shalt be with thee once more…
Author notes
For Pastel... 
If you'd like to read part 2 of this story, click here,
http://allpoetry.com/poem/4999111
Category 2: Write me a poem that tells a story..I don't care what it is about as long as it moves me. (no erotica please)
Commented on Dancing on Moonbeams
This is kind of a story/free-verse hybrid. Hope it works...
BG from http://downloads.khinsider.com/wallpaper/1280x1024/3620-vampire-009-tpzrl.jpg
I'm unsure of this pics origin, so if anyone knows who created it, please let me know so I can credit them... Thanks...
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- CREATURES OF THE NIGHT by Devilish Temptation.
450 points, ended August 5, 2008, 10 entries
Bronze trophy winner
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Comments
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No doubt a golden write
This is the piece that had me entranced from the beginning until the end. Every stanza is engaging. Every line generates sheer poetic power. This is honestly one of the best writes I've read on this site. This is the kind of work that I'd seriously consider a magnum opus. The poem itself seems to be alive, moving fluidly and yearning for immortality. It won gold because it simply is a golden write. I couldn't find any reason why I shouldn't give it gold.
You are truly blessed, dear poet. Keep the ink flowing.
- Dray
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Awoken only by a mournful lullaby
that heralds to my soul
The trouble I am seeing wihin this poem is the inconsistancy of vampireism that prevails throughout my known universe, the main crux being that those taken no longer have a soul.
Yes I am being pedantic but then I am an old fashioned sod who believes that some things should always lie within certain perameters, by glorifying and glamourising Vampires many of todays writers in my opinion have taken away the fear factor once associated with the creatures but as say I am an old fashion soul. -
Thank you for your amazing write and presentation, good luck in my contest, Josie
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GREAT!
I love this poem. Great style, different than what I am used to, but its good. BTW thanks to CeilidhaChaos for showing me this poem!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!
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knew you'd love it!
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very good
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Oh man..I wish this one could count because I really like it and..While it isn't catagorised at erotica..There is too much in it for me to allow it in my contest..Please don't be offended if it is amazing work and I really do love your style of writing :0) It looks like this piece has won quite a bit deservedly. Thank you for entering though. I won't DQ this so other people can comment on it.
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this was crazy good...you could turn this into a best selling novel..lol...
the story pulled me in, I was captivated..I couldn't pull my eyes away from the screen..thanks for sharing this with me
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A M A Z I N G
You are quite an artist ya know that. I love how he is submissive to her and she is the fallen angel who sways him by force and nurturing. He truly loved her I could tell because it wasn't just about feeding after that. I cannot wait to read the next part. I will soon. I hope you are working on getting this one published. Wonderful stuff.
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I sired their children,
I raped their women,
So evil! I like this poem, it was very entertaining. Thank you for entering and best of luck to you! -
Well damn...there's not enough APPLAUSE here to let you know how delicious this is....
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amazing
wow what a sad and dark tale of love eternal...you have woven such incredable words from the pit of your mind.......was gripped by everyword.....for there is no vengence that could ever ease the suffering of losing your love and soul.....well done fritz.....genius as always
xxx
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Kyah~ I just loved it! Wonderful, wonderful~~
"Awoken only by a mournful lullaby
that heralds to my soul
that she walks this Earth once more.
Yearning, stirring, awakened.
I rise with purpose,
shaking off the murky shackles
of deepest slumber.
Ravenous, I feed and brave this new world,
searching, craving, tasting her very essence
on the edge of darkest perception."
I loved that stanza. ♥ I loved the story you weaved into this... Congratz on all of your trophies. O:
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A bit to graphic for me...well done though...all the best in the contest
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WOW
Beautiful!! This poem is so passionatly written!!!
Forever and always,
Hannah
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Oh wow bro
This is an amazing story
Beautiful and tragic
left me longing for more
so i am off to read part 2
Hugggzzz fire
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Dweller walker of the night
awsome write
I think I have found a favorite
good work
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Well done! I actually have that picture on my phone! Thank you so much for entering
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Wow hun..this is a most surprising and beautiful..dark write..I love the lot of it..it brings me a since of content..for your poem reminds me of the world around us and how it will tear us and the ones we love to pieces.
A most entertaining,and saticfing write..I hope that there are more like this because I would love to read somemore of them..
love the write..marvolous job,dear..
Sarah
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A wonderful story,
well written, and classic in nature. I loved it.
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God, you get in my brain.
***Rae***
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Ok ! I swallowed rather hard this time.
Choked and absorbed the impact this poem story etched upon my mind.
Each stanza gave its own individual stroy.
Some are deep, seductive, and dark.
Wow you blew me away.
Brilliant
Best wishes Julie
*clappy
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Wow...
I'm awestruck... It was beautiful yet sad tale of the vampire world... I love it! Love it, love it, love it! You, my good sir, are a wonderful poet... I bow at your genius yet again... Lovely work...
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Holy Mother of Pearl Jam~
Excellent piece You have penned and what a story told- could be made into a movie
Wonderful weaving of words!
Bravo~ imagery stuns the reader catatonic-
a good thing I might say
We made bitter sweet love
in the falling ashes of Pompeii.
We kissed without abandon
as Rome burned and perished.
These lines grabbed~
Congratulations on Your Trophies!
-Throws confetti-
Woooooooooo Hoooooooooooo
Thank You for sharing Your Talent and Spirit~
Many blessings to You in all You do Sweet Soul
Best wishes too
with much love & light~ Desire~*~
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Well this still read as superb as it did the first time, love the tale told here! Thank you for entering and good luck
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Once again,
You are in my finalist list. I cannot ignore your talent. Well done! -
I liked this, it is agreat vampire write, though I think that the write itself is a tad bit long. Still the wording and imagery were there.
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Hi!
I have a contest going at this time called "Romancing the Vampire Lover", that this piece would be perfect for this is the link. http://allpoetry.com/contest/2428809
I'd love to have it there.
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I really liked it. The flow was great and i really loved the storyline to the whole thing. Yes it really worked with me. I really felt this one. It was exactly what i was looking for in this option,. Well done and best of luck in the contests.
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Wow........
Oh my word, that was breathtaking......
You wrote of many lifetimes in this piece, a love story spanning centuries. I could feel the pain in the beginning, as he realised the decision he had made. You captured the bittersweet anguish and romanticism perfectly....
And again, as we travelled through time with them, the pain was tangible when she was taken away. And the feeling of useless revenge, still not bringing her back.....
The end, she returns, the desperate need to find her.... this really is a wonderful piece.
If I could give you ten clappy things I would.
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Wow, just look at these trophies!
Congrats to you for one and all!
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Absolutely a wonderfully done poem. It is captivating and strong throughout the entire piece. I did notice it was not marked adult and due to the sexual reference there I think perhaps you should mark it as such But most fabulous writing
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Very good, not much as of a history lesson but I liked it none the less. Thank you for your entry, and good luck.
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awesome, so she came back and he was looking for her right? just wanted to make sure i got it right.
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Yeah, you got it right...
May write a sequel at some stage where he finds her...
Take care,
Fritz...........
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This is superb! I just love it. Best of luck in the contest.
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Fantastic! Wonderful work!
This is exactly what Im looking for. The begining was well done, just the right amount of love and when the turn came towards the middle i was a little unsure but as it went on i just fell in love with it. Fantastic!
Thankyou ever so much for entering,
best of luck.
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could you please tell me your name...or username?
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So sorry, Username is now in the Author's notes...
Take care,
Fritz......
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Congrats on the gold!
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Congrats on the well-deserved Gold!
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this is dark in a b movie kind of way, i'm not not knoking it i love them films,well done
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lol - thought I'd been here before
yup - I still like this one!
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WOW! I hardly noticed the length of this, your words, the emotion, the dark and twisted romance, the imagery, just everything about this is simply superb! Words to adequately give voice to how this makes me feel completely escape me. I can't believe this has only won a solitary bronze...and it's definately a favourite of mine this contest....Thank you SO much for sharing this, the tale you've woven here is a delight to the senses. Thank you also for taking the time to enter this creation into my contest,
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A Dark Deliscious Epic!
I CONSUMED THIS WITH PASSION!!! This is a wonderful Vamp write...the emotion and the reality amazing! I felt lost in this virtual world...hunting...feeding...exacting revenge. Thank you so much for sharing this my friend...it is wonderful!
Az
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WOW - this starts right out with a powerful beginning - and just keeps going. I love this! So full of depth, images and great emotion! I was pulled right into this from the first line - and held there! I felt almost 'lost' when it ended - I wanted MORE...lol...
Oustanding! Congrats on the well-deserved trophy.
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WOW!!!
Hell yes this works! Wowzers! A fabtastic tale, so worth the length, in fact I could have read much more. The passion in your words is spellbinding. Forever is a long time, but when filled with revenge I think it would begin to pass quite quickly. Still the hole isn't filled, the sad truth of loss. Brilliantly captured! I love this one Has to go in my hall...Pweese?
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Yay Linking it now Will you be adding to this?
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I don't think I'll add to it, but I may do a sequel...
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It was... interesting to say the least. I thought maybe just a bit too long for my taste ^_^; Good none-the-less though
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WOW WOW WOW
This piece is amazingly beautiful I absoultely love it.
I'm speechless my jaw dropped when I read it. Fangtastic.
The flow was excellent it's a talented and unique poem I have ever read
well done my friend and good luck for the contest
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Enticing
This was really good!! I absolutly love this peice!!! Though I myself am more partial to rhyming poems, I belive this was better than any rhyming one I have read. Ecellent Work!!! Very Good Job!!! I'm very glad to have gotten to read it!! Thank you for entering and Good Luck! -
I agree with the comment below
And yes! the 'story/free-verse hybrid'
Definitely works--to say the least!!!
I find something new and excitingwith each read! I am struck
and smitten with this fantastical
account of love in the darkness.
*rose*
~Pastel
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This has got to be the absolute best vampire poem I've ever read! I really like vampires, probably more than a person should, but you....you took the best and the worst parts of being Immortal and created a masterpiece. CONGRADULATIONS!!!!
Jessi
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