I heard your views on love
And thought,
"How narrow is your view"
For you
To fail to see that lust is not
The defining way in love.
To want their body for your own
To hold their person close
To hear their words
But never care the meaning
Of their verse.
Lust filtrated, burning eyes.
Suppressing doubt and fear.
Refuse to feel that it's not real.
That this just is not love.
Author notes
Well... I saw a certain someone's thoughts on love. I'd replicate it here. But that'd just hurt.
Please tell me what you think
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Wait...
So... You did write this?
Well anyway, whether or not it was yours, it certainly doesn't sound like something you'd say! Congratulations, I think you have a new style!
I liked this a lot. It left me wondering what my aspect on love was. For me, it's someone you care for, someone you can't imagine life without. Someone... who means the world to you.
Anyway, Naz, this was beautiful. The emotion was sprawled everywhere, in such a beautiful way. Nice imagery, I agree line #12 was really cool.
~Pandy
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Oh yes! It was all me, though I rephrased someone else's words in some of this. This someone did hurt me greatly once. And it was saddening to see that she's still like she is.
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We're not even supposed to be talking to u....then u opy a poem by her....Naz, do u wanna know what happened to us when they found out we were talking to u? I'll tell u, we barely had our lives!
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Okay third time's the charm. I am once again re-writing my comment. What can I say? Your poem left me stunned. Loved line 12 by the way. I found it absolutely inspiring. Anyways, great job and keep up the writing.
~Avan~
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Lacie! Do u wanto get in trouble again?
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w.o.w!
this is short, but very very impactful! i love this so very much! your emotions were just pouring here... its just so raw and true! a great, deep and emotional write with so much imagery! keep writing kays!
AWESOME!
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Why, thank you greatly! I shall try my best!
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