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Beautifully Anointed

 

Breathtaking, your brilliance radiates
Consuming, you take my breath away
Until I really see you
and become your indulgence
Embedded in your sinking sand, I run from you

Truth unveils what lies behind
those beautiful diamond eyes
When the scales are removed from blinded eyes,
such as I
Notice impure motives and seductive lies,
leading her prey into the mouth of lions, waiting to be devoured

Depart from me, O Jezebel
Even though I want you so,
you are detrimental to my living,
as you are beautifully anointed

with poison

 

 

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Lowercase Prelude - Chris

Age: 20
AP Family desired

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  • Night Terrors
    August 7, 2008

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    well I love this must have been a bitch huh very good write thanks for entering


  • movedon
    July 24, 2008

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    Truth unveils what lies behind
    those beautiful diamond eyes

    Such beautifully penned words here my friend! I especially loved this stanza. "beautiful diamond eyes" is a lovely metaphor. Great work.

    Warmest,
    Mylee


  • crazymomma
    July 12, 2008

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    I enjoyed reading this even though I don't see where the cheer me up part came into play. The imagery and word choice were wonderful in this. Thanks for entering


  • thepoetsings
    July 7, 2008

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    I really liked the idea in the fourth line about becoming an indulgence to another. Very nice phrasing. Just some great images throughout the piece, though I think my favorite is the "beautifully anointed" bit.

    No editorial notes. Thank you very much for entering and sharing


  • Haiku-bless-you silver member
    July 3, 2008

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    HOODWINK!

    This is a powerful poem of realization, seeing things as they are and not as we had hoped them to be. Timing is critical, is it too late? Loved the punch of the last line! Well done!

    You have been Hoodwinked by your Poetic Bandit family today because WE CARE!

    Bandits Rock!

    Dennis


  • RawrSmileBabyPlz
    June 25, 2008
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    Very well written i like it alot. It amazed me. I could feel and picture the emotions as i read. my favorite part is when you said "Breathtaking, your brilliance radiates
    Consuming, you take my breath away" thanks for entering my contest. I wish you the best of luck
    ..<3..
    Shelly

  • RawrSmileBabyPlz
    June 25, 2008

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    Very well written i like it alot. It amazed me. I could feel and picture the emotions as i read. my favorite part is when you said "Breathtaking, your brilliance radiates
    Consuming, you take my breath away" thanks for entering my contest. I wish you the best of luck
    ..<3..
    Shelly


  • Lady Australis silver member
    June 24, 2008
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    beautuifuly done

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