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Sugar Coated

Stop dreaming in your fantasy land
Full with cotton candy and gumdrops
Rainbow sugarcoated cancer causing lollipops
Merry-go-round style Russian roulette
All you dream is what you'll get

Now honey, now sweet little baby doll
There’s a difference between fantasy and insanity
You rosie cheeks and butterfly eyelashes tells it all
No one is pushing the rope you are swinging from stiffly
Build you prison-one fluffy marshmallow at a time
Artificial flavoring is sweet just as all your lies

Watch you teeth rot away
From sugary sweets and sweet demises
Feel your brain began to drain
When the sugar fed rush drops away
Go back to your swing set and swing all day
Licking your lollipops-increasing the decay
Letting the rainbow’s smoke fill your brain
Watch your dreams sparkle away

Please-wake her up
To terrorist fear and blowing up gasoline trucks
To nuclear warfare and Columbine mass murdering punks
To Tiananmen Square and mental diseases
To middle class retirement and Katrina Hurricanes
To ignorant misguided leaders and starving babies
To bullies, liars, thieves, and dreamers.

I’ll take your hand, if you take mine
And try our luck in this beautiful grey world’s demise
Among the blackened ashes-leave the bright rainbows to die
The throbbing burning truth makes us want to lie

Author notes

"I Want Real Change" <- Inspiration

Basically, this is a collection of my frustrations of three friendships. Including a friend who abused drugs, a friend who isolated herself, and a friend who constantly lied to herself.
Very sad times for me, and this is an outlet and not directed at anyone.

please give me feedback!

A contest entry

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  • With Broken Wings
    August 30, 2008
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    Brilliant write, congrats! I like how you took my prompt and interpreted it in your own way.. The piece came out beautifully written. It's a very strong and powerful poem.. Thank you for enteringg! Good luck

  • With Broken Wings
    June 26, 2008

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    Hey!! thank you for enteringg..

    YOur prompt choices are:

    - "You're my drug... And I'm addicted"
    - "I Want Real Change"
    - "Life isn’t worth living unless you’re willing to take some big chances and go for broke."
    - "Sketches of Love in My Head"

    Good luckk! take it as you wantt..

    -With Broken Wings-

    ooh, and if you are having trouble with the prompts or just dont like them, or dont think of anything to do it to those, just tell me and ill see what i can do