I can't talk to my true love,
becuase you don't approve.
Who are you to keep us apart?
Nothing will stop us,
I will just move before you can blink.
Don't you dare try to take him away,
if you want me to stay.
Don't dare.
Author notes
this is a personal situation thats true
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- Something made you sad by Kelly2h.
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thanks for joing my contest this is a good poem and i wish you good luck
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I don't think it's childish!! =O I like it ^_^ Very great write!! keep it up!
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you go girl/guy!
This was strong and powerful... you should never let anything come between you and the one you love! stay strong and keep the faith alive... beautiful piece (not childish)
AWESOME!
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I disagree with the other comment here.
I think this is quite decent. It's true and emotional.
Sometimes we just write so we don't go crazy thinking about our problems. I think this is just fine.
Yes, it needs works and it's rather odd. But it's not childish.
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CHILDISH
If only you saw how childish your own words are.
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