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very sorry.

My words
as harsh as thorns,
Hurt my cutie,
And
I could not understand.
It happened
Inadvertently.
May I
Repent?

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  • maralisa silver member
    June 28, 2008

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    a great take on the promt itis hard for us to repent in live sometimes but it makes us a better person for doing so to admit our wrongs as well as our rights
    I could not understand.It happened Inadvertently.May I
    Repent?good luck in the contest


    • Aliya Abbas
      June 28, 2008
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      yes i agree it is difficult to repent. people feel admiting mistakes makes them infrior or harms their dignity. but I feel though a 'sorry' is not going to benefit or harm u it will definitely console the heart that u have hurt. never hesitate to apologise.


  • Sweet Impatience gold member
    June 27, 2008

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    this is a great take on the prompt. so true how words can hurt the ones that we care about. friends forgive, thats part of what we do.
    I love your poem.

    good luck

    kat


  • dustookie2
    June 24, 2008
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    So will I.

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