exposing softly curved shoulders
pale and glowing under candlelight
with artful touches of your fingers
you soothe the complexities of me
a body no longer young, yet
in your eyes I am beautiful
nurturing, a trait attractive
to a man who knows his wants
hips rounded and smooth under your hands
breasts which have suckled, buds aching
for your lips; lights shining
when you lose yourself in my eyes
shy glances, yearnings left unsaid
with the sureness of a lover's touch
you awaken desires long hidden away
and take me to the crest of pleasure
tender loving in the stillness
of the hours before dawn, when
you reach deep inside the woman to
draw out the girl still hiding there
Author notes
Picture credit:
http://fatallook.deviantart.com/art/Sensual-85944312
A contest entry
- A big big big big big CONTEST..pic inspired...you tell me what type of pic you want!! by MaMa-2-be-Cindy.
1800 points, ended July 7, 2008, 30 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me what you think
Comments
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Oh, this is powerfully sensual, a most brilliant write my dear. Just one bit of advice though; I think it would be even more powerful if you dropped the last two lines, as it would leave the reader to wonder. Just a thought.
Love and peace always,
mj.
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Thank you dear
I think your thought is right.
Love Margaret
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Wow.....this was a deep read. So glad I had the pleasure and I wish you luck you shouldn't need.
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Wow, touching and tender. Very nice piece, much enjoyed. I don't normally read sensual but this was beautifully done. Good luck in the contest
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Beautiful
A beautiful, tender and sensual write
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Thank you Aaron
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Tender
This poem speaks love and sensuality right from the first lines;
"exposing softly curved shoulders
pale and glowing under candlelight
with artful touches of your fingers
you soothe the complexities of me"
A woman's touch can do that to me...ease my mind as I drift away. Such a perfectly structured piece with very effective and sensual language always just insinuating, never direct.
"I like the way you open your arms to me and
hold me tenderly as we drift off to sleep"
Perfect ending. Each one of those words is in my mind as a dream; one day we'll fall asleep together...one day my love.
Such pretty poetry. 9.5/10!
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beautiful and sensual
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beautifully sensual with a touching sensitivity. I really enjoyed this piece, isn't it wonderful when someone is able to reach this inner longing.
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i love the beginning here - and though i did think of punctuation i did think back to either use it or don't with poems, np half and half and you have not dont that here, a powerful piece i think this it, and i have only read the first two verses as yet - maybe not using the word smooth again in the third verse as you just used it? other than that, this poem i enjoyed.
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this is such a wonderful write that is so beautifully written with a lot of thought and meaning that adds that hidden voice to the picture and something else as well that is grasping. I truly love how you took this picture mum. well done and best of luck
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great write!! this is so beautiful! wow good luck in the contest!
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Wow, this was a fantastic piece of work. I really liked it and thought you did a great job writing it. good luck to you in the contest.
~~Tori~~
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this is simply fantastic! encore! encore!
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So very sensual, filled with, such easy to read, poeitc words....Beautiful write inspired from the picture..
I adored--
tender loving in the stillness
of the hours before dawn when
you reach deep inside the woman to
draw out the girl still hiding there
I like the way you open your arms to me and
hold me tenderly as we drift off to sleep
Thank you for this great poem
Good luck
Cin
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Oh hun this is just so beautiful! I could relate to every word of this. Your imagery is gorgeous and so wonderfully poignant and sensual. Love your last two lines
Damn! Love the whole thing!
All the very best with this
Gaylene
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