Soft.
Warm.
So - easily - molded.
Coarse hands roughly force it to contort.
Violating.
Abusing.
- The PAIN / is too much -
It hardens.
shrinks.
becomes - like stone
Now a sculpture. A work of art delicately chiseled by a monster. No longer can it be called beautiful, for the beauty of it is unbearable-almost ugly.
No longer can it be warm.
An icy darkness has filled and covered it.
No longer can it be cherished.
Those who once loved it must now see the truth: When love becomes a lie, every heart deserves to die.
And so the once desired becomes undesirable.
The once fair becomes hideous.
Life becomes death.
And so dies that creation which all of mankind both needs and rebukes.
The heart.
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This poem reminded me of the book by Anne Rice that inspired the movie Queen of the Damned.
I think changing this line would really impact this poem:
"Love in the form of lies, deserves to die."
The way it rhymes makes it seem like something our of a Mother Goose book.
You could really put something powerful here.
The last line was AMAZING! Welcome to the finalist list. -
This is deeply painful and so real. Good luck.
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I really love this one! I think its my favorite! Oh...I ahve a new song 4 u, its called Lie by Serj Tankian!
It's sooooo cool, I love the piano! -
i clicked this cuz what u said on shamless
lol
that was funny!!
great poem!
love how it flows!!
love the black with the blue too!
SilverWolf -
this is excellent. i love the way you arranged it.
And so dies that creation which all of mankind both needs and rebukes.
The heart.
Love that line.
~lae
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this poem was interesting not only becaus of how it was written but because of how you visually aranged it with the spaces between lines and your use of dashes. my favorite part was at the end of line 15 - Love in the form of lies, deserves to die.
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i really like this.my fav line:
love in the form of lies deserves to die.
but i enjoyed every line from beginning to end. i had to read it out loud cause the way you wrote it with all the dashes.it sounded so good.it wAS different and thats great.
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Awww this is Beautiful! I love it!
Oh and by the way thankyou! I thanku ALOT!
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