Jimmy had a taste for bedlam,
Fast cars, fast women, guns, cops
This hell-bound train it never stops,
Jimmy had to taste some bedlam,
Jimmy had a taste for sorrow,
Lost the key, fell on dark days,
Never to return through the haze,
Jimmy had to taste some sorrow,
Jimmy had a taste for war,
No quarter given and none asked,
Behold here is a human unmasked,
Jimmy had to taste some war,
Jimmy had a taste for nature,
Found succor in the wilderness,
Lost in rhythms of animal madness,
Jimmy had to taste some nature,
Jimmy had a taste for faith,
A blind deaf mute made the decision,
Sold his soul cheap to an old religion,
Jimmy had to taste some faith,
Jimmy had a taste for love,
Memories made of nights by the sea,
Wonder and that feeling of being free,
Jimmy had to taste some love,
Jimmy now has sadly passed,
On his stone they gravely cast,
Jimmy left family and wife,
and Jimmy had a taste for life.
Please tell me what you think
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This is such a thought provoking piece. Great attention to detail, and the repetition added much for effect. A very well penned piece, which left such a stain of sadness, but also the thoughts of a life well lived. Nicely done!
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This is a belter a shape and sound that beguiles, ideas that astound. I particularly liked your switch of pattern and rhyme for the last verse. Two claps, matey, all I have left. Super-duper.
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this is stunning. the repetition incorporated is great and fits with the concept of a journey and its length is good since it talks about multiple aspects and concepts of a person's life through using stanzas that propose a topic then explain it in a two line description. i love the conclusion 'Jimmy now has sadly passed,
On his stone they gravely cast,
Jimmy left family and wife,
and Jimmy had a taste for life'. awesome job
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This was a really cool poem. Way to say someone's life without going through every details and making it melancholy and distant. Great work!
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awesome. great flow and rhyming. nice write
~lae
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Sad, but strong and good..most men have a taste for some of this if not all at once.
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