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It's All Over

my shell
is cracking and breaking
my faults are showing
and i cant seem to get away fast enough

im done playing the fool
the sounds of the falling pieces
hitting the floor
resound and echo

one more heartbreak
cant seem to hurt
just laughing as you walk away
its all over

backed into a corner
no escape
the worlding is closing in
and i cant wait for the fires to begin

im closer to the breaking point
the line is clearly marked
this has all been done before
there are no maps

my shell to the world
is breaking in plain sight
pieces lost to the world
i would love to start over

Author notes

I guess my veneer is losing its touch. I just cant seem to calm myself down. everything is happening in a blur and I just want to sit down and enjoy the sunshine.

 

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  • innocence jaded.xx
    June 23, 2008

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    What a poem ! I absolutely loved this. I can relate to well to most of it. The beginning of this piece held me until the end. I think we all feel like this sometimes.

    "one more heartbreak
    cant seem to hurt
    just laughing as you walk away
    its all over"

    <3 Those lines are just wow. Left me in awe basically You said it all right there. The other line I absolutely loved was "im done playing the fool" because of the control that's in that line. Great write :] Keep writing<3